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LOC: Indianapolis, IN
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: November 12
LOC: Indianapolis, IN
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: November 12
I would like to start off by thanking you for viewing my page. I hope you will enjoy your time here and assist me in finding ways to improve my writing. On a personal note, I’ve been happily married for eight years and the mother of two handsome sons, Terrell-age 16, Dominique-age 15, and an adorable daughter named LaKisha-age 2 1/2. In May of 2007, I went back to college to earn a BA degree in Business Administration w/ minor in Accounting. I currently work in the Insurance industry, but aspire to be a full-time novelist. Hopefully joining this site will help me get that much closer to reaching my goal.
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Whoosh! Darnell smiled triumphantly as he hit another three-pointer that would make even his idol, Michael Jordan, proud. “That’s game,” he hollered to the other five players on the court. Darnell shielded his eyes from the harsh glare of the overhead lights illuminating the basketball court and jogged over to his teammate, Mike. “You was on fire man,” Mike said with wide grin on his pecan brown face. His other teammate, AJ, came over to congratulate him as well ...
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“So who’s your favorite fighter in Poison Clan?” Ryan asked. Charlene settled back on the sofa with her legs folded underneath her. “Hmm, I’m not sure.” Ryan pointed to the television. “The Centipede has the best moves, plus he’s faster than the others.” Charlene stared at him in disbelief. “You’re tripping, right? Lizard has way better moves than Centipede plus he can walk on walls. I bet if the two them went at it, Lizard wou...
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This must be heaven, Ryan thought as his hands glided over Charlene’s velvety smooth skin. Their tongues darted between their mouths demanding attention. He inhaled deeply and held the scent of her perfume within his lungs as long as he could. “You smell wonderful,” he moaned pulling her closer to him. “Did you wear this just for me? I love the way it smells on you.” Charlene blushed, dipping her head before nodding. His nostrils flared as he took another deep wh...
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She lied to me! screamed the voice in Ryan’s head. And I fell for it. I fucking fell for it again! How could I’ve been so stupid? He closed his eyes, trying to block out the image of Charlene in the arms his nemesis, James Carter, but it was no use. It was now seared into the deepest, darkest part of his brain, replaying itself over and over, making him nauseous. He stumbled as he walked towards the parking lot, a feeling of utter despair weighing him down turning his feet to...
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Chapter 1 – Change Millersville, Georgia August 28, 1988 "Change can be a good thing," said Nana. Charlene slanted a glance at her father’s mother, a heavy set black woman she couldn’t remember seeing more than twice in the past 17 years. She slowly turned her gaze to the passing scenery outside the truck’s passenger window. “What's so damn good about it?” she mumbled under her breath. It had been made clear to Charlene that change was bad&...
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I read a previous chapter of this and enjoyed it. I like this one as well. I notice your writing improves with each installment. There were a few things that I thought could use some attentions. For instance, you might want to write.."You're a Wulver," he said to the man. Trec would go through...The man nodded... The closest door was a kept bedroom...Did you mean unkempt bedroom? It seems that how you're describing it in the next sentence. Her note went right over the human’s heads...I think ...
I really enjoyed reading this. You gave both Elizabeth and the postman the right touch of mystique. You also did a great job of allowing us to see the postman through Elizabeth's eyes. I almost thought this would be the beginnings of beautiful love story up to the very end. Loved the jaw-dropping ending which was very twisted. I guess the moral to the story is you should never go by first impression, people are never what they seem on the surface. Good Job!
I respect and applaud your moral stance on abstaining until marriage, however, I think you could get your message across a lot better if you didn't sound so preachy. Also, I think you went a little overboard with telling how unintersting your life is and how you don't have much to tell to the point I actually felt you didn't have anything worthwhile to say and wanted to stop reading. Instead of going into so much detail at the beginning about your lack of story, you could actually giving your...
Wonderful! Wonderful! I have absolutely nothing bad to say about this piece. The narrative was perfect for period and the little detail you put in really made the you feel as if you were living in the days of King Arthur and his court. I don't you think you'd have any problem getting this published. You have created a intriguing character in young seductress, Morgause. I cannot wait to read the next installment and see how the young grows in both beauty and power. Interesting that you are tel...
I thought it was very good beginning though I didn't notice few typo's and grammar issues that need to be addressed such as dropped off apostrophes, singular words that should be plural. You obviously have a wonderful talent for writing and I find the premise quite intriguing. I am assuming that the mc is emotionally telepathic -- meaning he can sense other people's emotions. I scene this written before, but I think if you a really good writer, which you are than it can be done in way that is...
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