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LOC: Fort Worth, TX
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the wrath of open source.. its getting to you seepin into your skull sucking you in until you realize that the corporate world isnt ready.. and then it spits you down the swirling tunnel in a neverending spiral until you land in Bill Gates hands and he rocks you to sleep.. comforting you and then you wake up.. in front of your Windows box
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When I look into your eyes, Reality slips through my fingers like sand. Everything that has happened is forgotten, And thoughts about the future never cross my mind. Sweet bliss is what I see. Words can’t explain it. It’s like a dream That I never want to wake from. And when I can’t hold my eyes open any more, I close them and pictures of times we spent together Run through my mind so fast I can’t concentrate on them. Then I open them back up and I see you. The one I love, Looking up at me. W...
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Great visuals. I really like how you set the scene up and constantly keep us updated on what your thoughts and sights are. I really liked it. There's a hint of a climax that leaves me wanting more... I like the ending.
The only thing that I can't quite get a grasp on is why the words were honey and then savored, yet then the subject dies inside... Bittersweet? Maybe, but overall I like the visuals...
Cute use of celebrity names and tie ins, but outside of that, there's no cohesive evidence that each passage goes together. Transitions are non-existent and make it difficult to figure out exactly what the author is getting at (which I still can't figure out). Though I do have to say that it's clever.
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