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Traipsing down the hall and mumbling to himself, His demons getting the best of him, again, A man of many fears and a vicious vice. When seen in light he is a landscaper, Plagued with hardship, looking for an easy fix, But when night ensues, he finds what he has so sought. He becomes An all too familiar stranger Looking for others to join him in his Jubilant misery. At twelve years old I know his games well But tonight he shows me he enjoys his malice, Enjoys enveloping my world with his fear...
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Silence pierced the dim lit room, Tragedy would be known soon. The ebb, the flow, the rise, the fall, The dead, the crow, the eyes, the wall. Extrapolating distorted faith, Manipulating a wispy wraith. Rectifying thought in motion, Subjectifying the tiniest notion. Eclesiastical retribution, Eccumenical contribution. Satisfying realized doom, Gratifying the dim lit room. Spurring others to find there foes, Luring more to read my prose. I am the one you hear in silence, I am the force behind y...
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Here my body lays, Rotting in a silent hell. Alone in many ways, Yet surrounded by the fated fell. Forever we have sought, What cannot be found. No matter how we've fought, None do lay on level ground. Laying at our feets, A giant epitaph, a tombstone. Covering old streets, Not allowing paths be shown. The epic tome is etched With eternal truth in words. Though our minds are stretched, We read eagerly in herds. It reads, "Here lies Time's hopeless romant...
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Wow, powerful, deep, moving and hits home with a generated subject, very well done. One of the only critiques I could give is maybe some of your references are a little too abstract for most readers to relate with, albeit used well for personal reasons making the poem yours alone, but maybe a few analogies or implied metaphors thrown in to lessen the confusion a bit. However that is only if you want to get this piece published, if that is not the case this piece is absolutely fantastic the wa...
unique, creative at times, even a little moving/inspiring. I enjoyed it, you really seem head over heels for this person, them as you/you as them, touching indeed. I really enjoyed when you said "I see me trying to be U and u trying to be me!", that was wonderful. As a personal poem, excellent, if you ever wanted to get something like this published, there needs to be a lot of fine tuning, but fantastic for personal sake. keep it up.
Oh my God you made me cry, this is very heartwarming indeed. Your rhymes didn't seem pushed until near the end but again you said some of the scatter was intentional so it works for this. You could almost separate this into three strophes and have drive the meaning home even a little bit more. You evoked emotion, you had an implied subject and a generated subject, it was very well done and I feel for this little girl, I really do. You made me feel as though I could empathize with her, and not...
You have taken the purest and rawest of emotion and mixed it, successfully I might add, with a scientific outlook, a purview seeming to invoke much from deep within. I really liked this a lot "I am thrilled in her touch, her passion, her need matches my own" has got to be my favorite couple lines, it really shows the two of you as intrinsic souls intertwined in the depths of the universe. I look forward to reading more
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