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AGE: 32
LOC: Seattle, WA
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: August 23

Well, lets see… I am a Gemini, I have ADHD and OCD, so I’m pretty hard to deal with a lot of the time – totally run off on tangents, easily distracted, randomly run off in all kinds of strange directions. I appreciate Irony and Symbology… Easily amused (oh, BTW… if I tell you that you amuse me, it’s a GINORMOUSLY FABULOUS compliment). I am a big stickler for people speaking at least one language with some fluency – so unless you’re being campy, don’t make up words – there are so many unused words in the English language, there’s really no need. I am silly, and sometimes pompous, mercurial, energetically lacadaisical, full of complex contradictions, and well… just me. Nobody else, and I really have no desire to change – I do that …

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Poetry / A Tree in the Land
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I walk, remembering long journeys travelling, travelling a seed on the wind searching for soil in which to root I rise, walking these hills keeping my flocks following a promise. I ascend to the river look out at my future and cross, eyes wide open uncertain of what I may find but faithful, hopeful. I watch as the land turns barren turns away from my face and my children, my seed again borne upon the wind continue blowing west into the land of another to provide, and be provided for so far fr...
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Poetry / Leviathan
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Appearances can be most deceiving and things often times are far from what they seem. Everyone sees my smile my mask, my shield never suspecting what lies beneath. You say to me "How do you live in the moment flitting from this to that in a constant state of distraction?" Nothing breaks the surface never to penetrate my façade. I am not introspective outside these few lines. I do not delve deeply for inside my irises black and thick as night is naught but a brooding morass demons and wraiths ...
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Poetry / Six Word Memoir: Silence is Golden
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Silence is Golden. I'm happier poor. Willem Gates (C)2008
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Poetry / Maestro
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It begins slowly. A glance, a langorous look slumber fading from drooping eyelids. Shift, a small brush of hand on thigh, small of back eliciting a sigh, small moan and arch of back. Momentum shifts, tempo increases your fingers moving legato tracing the page of skin, conducting my staccato breath. Slow again, intermezzo... soft strain of strings, hands gliding again just before they dig in surprising crescendo of brass drums banging, beating madly tribal in intensity only to fade again the s...
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Poetry / Failure to Serve
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We call our young men and women "to arms... to arms" go out into the world do your duty, for God and Country and with advertising campaigns we sell the myth "Be an Army of One" all that you can be here's your ticket boy we'll be proud of you. So our poor rise up take the only opportunity they see to escape their poverty cracked-out street corners shadowing their futures and walk into this spoon-fed lie with a blind hope. They do what we ask of them go where we send them We watch them in the g...
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Poetry / First Amongst Equals
by Keith
I'm usually not fond of rhyming meters, but this one successfully makes the rhyme secondary to the flow of the piece. Wonderfully crafted in that. Fix your title. Amongst is not appropriate. It should simply be "Among". Amongst is far too archaic for the tone of this piece. Otherwise, a great memorial piece.
Poetry / Mother America
by DaniRai
Wonderful protest piece, and I love the tone - it's a very powerful voice. In critique, be sure to watch your grammar and also that you're using the appropriate word - You/Your, Then/Than, etc. The last line of the first stanza... if you really are trying to have "soon" be the answer to the question posed, then you should use some puntuation to establish that... "only a matter of time... soon" or "only a matter of time: soon". Something like that. Your second stanza is the strongest. Remember...
Poetry / Mine
by stevedclancy
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Poetry / Two Become One
by peejie
An amazing piece - brief and to the point (much as the flame that is your metaphor). Your line breaks are immaculate and your images are succinct. If I were to correct anything at all, it would be to add punctuation at then end of your line breaks, or to avoid puntuation at all (at the end of the piece). Either would be good, but with two slightly different feels. 1. Three solid thoughts, combined into a cohesive piece with definitive endings. 2. One solid piece, but with an open, lingering q...
Poetry / Sub-Zero
by Danny_Darko
This piece lacks focus... it reads more like prose than poetry. Try giving it a structure, which will only help the reader to find and follow your rhythm - the voice of your work is lost - it reads like a ramble. Your images are good, but again, without a structure, they just get lost. Break up your lines and bring it back - I'd be interested to see just how you intend it to be read.
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