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The fiction of Thaisa Frank, according to the New York Times, works “by a tantalizing sense of indirection.” The critic Don Skiles has described her stories as being “in the grand tradition of the fairy tale, the legend, the spell,” and the reviewer Rob Hurwitt has called her work “domestic magical realism.” She is the recipient of two PEN Awards, a two-time Bay Area Book Reviewer’s Association nominee and has been on the Bestseller List of the San Francisco Chronicle. Her two most recent books of fiction are SLEEPING IN VELVET (1998), and A BRIEF HISTORY OF CAMOUFLAGE (1992). Thaisa Frank’s work has appeared in anthologies, among the most recent of which is the Polish anthology ROZNE KSZTALTY MILOSCI, 2002 (ed. Agnieszka Kudyba, Wydawni…

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Short Story / Henna
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Henna I will call her Ms. Shari, even though she was married. Still, Ms. Shari is how the head of the department and I spoke of her in a tense unhappy discussion behind closed doors. I was teaching at a state university--crowded, under funded, with clocks that never worked, irritable faculty and windowless rooms that induced fugue states. Still, it was generous, because it admitted almost everyone: The campus looked like an international mall. There were women in tight jeans and four inch he...
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Poetry / Treatment
Don't believe these ratings. They're an absurd part of this system. I don't think a child would say "depart"--but "go away" and you could get in some good imagery by telling us where she wanted to go to. I find the ending flat. Some others might not. The poem seems to wrap up in her rationalization. Remember "no surprise for the writer, no surprise for the reader." What is the surprise here? What transformation does the poem go through? But the poem is sad and does most of its job by moving t...
This reads as a linear anecdote, so while the material is interesting, I'm not sure why it's in the form of a poem. What would happen if you didn't present it as a poem? Would you want to take as big a leap over time--summarizing so much so quickly? And would it be easier to make this take a leap from an anecdote to a story? You might want to take a look at my book, co-authored with Dorothy Wall, Finding Your Writers Voice. And also take a look at my piece on both Red Room and Wordswimmer, Wr...
Haiku/Senryu / Seventh Haiku--Life
To my mind, this almost makes it as a haiku, but there are a couple of words that tlle me too much--and of course if you take them out, you'll have to find other words to make it seventeen syllables. But these were the words and prhases that told me more than I needed to know: Life subtle You must In general, haikus offer portraits of life, without steering the reader too far into knowing what the "attitude" about it is, until perhaps the very end; if you study Ryokan, for e.g., you'll see th...
Sci Fi & Fantasy / Such Blood that Binds (pt. 1)
This works well at setting a scene. But, to my mind, the scene is most of the story, and the narrative arc--the arc of danger and peril--happens near the end. Is it possible that this is, in fact, closer to the beginning of th the story and that the story continues? It's easy to conflate an interesting setting for a narrative arc, but they're different, even though there are elements within the scene tha pull out the narrative arc. I would like a sense of Olgrid as a character---however, you ...
A word from the less-is-more school of poetry: To be honest, I think the first stanza almost says it all. What about skipping the middle stanza which is quite abstract, and working with the image of the cold dark and dead stars and warm night? It's these sorts of dissonant images that are the stuff of poetry.
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