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AGE: 23
LOC: Australia
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: September 02

I’m Australian, I’m from the country, moved to the city (UrbanRenewal) ohhh clever. :-P

I’m 6’2 with black hair and hazel eyes, I love writing but almost never finish anything. Well, never actually. I always get the first paragraph into the story and think of another new idea and concept and start writing about that one. I have approximately 31 unfinished stories in my head and computer combined.

Bugger.

Oh, and I’m fine with reviewing your work, truly I am, however, if you have more than 4 criteria to evaluate on, and they are NOT vital to know? I’m not going to review it. If your going to ask me to evaluate your work, make mention in your note to reviewers why it is important that you had 8 Criteria to evaluate on. There is n…

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Sci Fi & Fantasy / Wink (Fantasy as opposed to modern)
Version 1
7 Reviews   29 Comments
  A knock sounded at the door to her workshop, without opening the heavy wooden slab, she already knew who it would be. It entirely escaped her understanding as to why he didn’t pass through the wall like any of the other members of his group would have. Wink had always been reluctant to admit his nigh god-hood status; he walked when he could cover vast distances in fractions of a second, he knocked when he could already see everything in a room, and could walk straight through the...
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Sci Fi & Fantasy / As the Storm Strikes
Version 1
4 Reviews   8 Comments
  Sergeant James Hellion turned and lifted his eyes to the darkening horizon. No one had paid much attention to rain prior to that day exactly one year ago, maybe a quick glance at the weather report to see if an umbrella was necessary on that particular day. Now… now almost every human in existence had developed a keen sense of weather knowledge. Rain meant death, unless you were a capable fighting force with the guns to back up your balls, you were going to die. Unless you could...
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Poetry / Oh scarf!
Version 1
9 Reviews   17 Comments
Oh silly scarf, Why do you flutter there in the breeze, Full of vigorous energy as, You try to entangle my knees! Oh silly scarf, Why do you try to run from me, When all I want is your warmth, Silly scarf, can you not see? Oh silly scarf, Why does the cold hate us so? It's biting chilling frost that hurts, That silly wind that makes us slow. Oh silly silly scarf, I'm glad we're friends and lovers, You're a funny one Mr Scarf, Graciously given by my mother. Oh silly scarf! What an affair ...
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Sci Fi & Fantasy / Plane Jumper
Version 2
8 Reviews   8 Comments
 “Don’t move Flick!” Khari urged her companion, switching her eyes to the other members of her group to show the phrase was inclusive of them also. Flicker had accidentally inserted himself between his comrades and a gigantic bulbous bipedal creature. A monster with pure white crystalline eyes and deadly razor claws that dripped a green tinged substance, which sparked and hissed as it fell to the floor, over shadowed the other members of the party. Its needle sharp teet...
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Poetry / The less I hear you say
Version 2
7 Reviews   15 Comments
The sweat soaked sheets tangled through your thighs, Of minutes passed and heavy sighs, Your bosom heaves in exhertion, I shake my head and zip up. It's like the further in your mouth I am, the less I hear you say, I shake my head and hope that you won't stay, How long will this game continue, of chess in bedroom stances. My King mounts your Queen and rides her, Reminscent of passionate lovers stirring, Except there is no love, is there dear? It up and left, as we both did. I converge on y...
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Poetry / filled with space
by Deadsage
Widely dilated my missing skin abscesses, did you perhaps mean Widely dilated by missing skin abscesses? Or Widely dilated, my missing skin abscesses. As your body can't really DO an abscess per se. I'd fix this one line then the rest of the poem is just rather wow. Obviously you have a huge and varied command of the english language "as frost creeps, opaquely shading windows" was a really beautiful line that left me rather speechless. Evidently you've been practicing poetry for quite some ti...
Poetry / If Winter Comes (For Daddy)
by Trina
So first, it was a really good use of the seasons to convey death/life. And I think this has been done numerous times before but you still managed to pull it off without being cliche. So credit to you there because a lot of people really over do the metaphor. To hide away the world outside, ^^ While it's a pretty sign, and we understand what you are trying to convey, it ultimately failed. Because it sounds like you want to hide away the actual world outside, instead of hiding away from it. I ...
Poetry / LOVE IS LIKE A ROSE
by Anonymous
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Poetry / colourful hatred
by image2217
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Poetry / Into Darkness
by toltecwar
en-tro-py   –noun 1. Thermodynamics. a. (on a macroscopic scale) a function of thermodynamic variables, as temperature, pressure, or composition, that is a measure of the energy that is not available for work during a thermodynamic process. A closed system evolves toward a state of maximum entropy. You can't entropy into a void. You really need to understand the words you are using. I get that entropy is a pretty word. But it's not a doing word. You should always check up on words your not re...
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