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AGE:
42
LOC: Port Saint Lucie, FL
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: January 04
LOC: Port Saint Lucie, FL
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: January 04
“Writing is the window into a person’s soul”.
Been writing since I can remember. Nothing published as of yet, but I plan on it.
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He backed me into the darkest corner of the shop. His lips pressed hard against mine, his tongue-thrusting, entwining within my mouth. I wore a short skirt, as he requested with no underwear. He took full advantage of my exposed pussy. I felt his hands pull at my skirt. I gasped as he stuck his index and middle finger as far as it would go into my twat. His other hand firmly seized my breast. He was pressed against me so hard, it was becoming uncomfortable. Suddenly we heard a voice coming f...
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Chapter 1 Our eyes locked for a minute, then I looked her up and down. She looked good, and I knew she knew it. Brown skin, Almond shaped eyes, off black pantyhose, high heels, satin like short skirt, and a revealing fishnet black shirt with no bra. Was that her nipple caught in one of the many holes in the material? I got excited, imagining taking it into my mouth, gnawing gently on it, flicking my tongue against it. I was rudely brought out of my thoughts by my date’s shrill whisper, “What ...
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In the kitchen I tend to getting his breakfast ready. Eggs, Shaved steak, Grits, and English muffins…anything he wants I will make. As long as he, Terry, comes home to me. I bring his food into the room where he is lying. He sits up to receive his plate, and cup of tea. I love this man so much; none of my friends can understand it. If he asks me to jump, I’ll ask how high. My girls give me hell about it, but what do they know, they don’t have a man like Terry. Bitches, but I love them. After ...
Version 2
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THE THRILL OF THE HUNT I passed his aunt and uncle’s home slowly, on the secluded road, taking note of whose cars were parked in the yard. Proceeding to the wooded lot a few yards down, I pulled my BMW into the area he had cleared for me weeks ago to help “hide” my vehicle from passerbys. Emerging from the drivers seat I grab “our” blanket from the backseat. I set the car alarm by remote, and head to our area. Getting thru the brush has started becoming routine for me. We have met here countl...
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This is a good piece. As it started I could imagine the pain the character went through while recieving the scars and cuts on his/her body. The black toenail only bought the poem more real. Poem is good, sad, but very good.
Overall I think this piece is a good start. The details in the story were on point, the weather, the wool damp, the umbrella, but if you didn't know or could imagine well a person could get lost in the reading. In the beginning of the story as we were told of her "friends" I started to get a bit lost. I find that unless these people are continuously involved, a writer tends to loose it's audience. Being that this is the beginning of a longer story, which all does not exist here, the introduct...
GREAT PIECE!!!! I was interested from beginning to end. This story had everything, a beginning, middle, and an end. I liked how it started out, Pat was portrayed to be a loser. Then he was "drafted". Once there he is clearly not happy. He is tricked by the enemy into thinking a boy needs help, Only to be ambushed. Great Job. Kudos
This piece could lead to a bigger things. Lot's of description and explaination. I could follow along very easily. When his partner came in and startled him, making him spill coffee over himself brought it together. This man is a man like all others. Definitley worth shaping. Good Luck.
Sounds like a good children's story. I could imagine the illustrations following the words that are written. Reminded me of the Dick and Jane stories I've read as a child. Although a bit short, it's a good beginning. Good luck.
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