It was a good poem but I was not sure of what you were trying to convey. Perhaps you should put more clarity in the next one. I look foward to seeing more of your work.

This poem is fantastic. The message you set here is undeniably a brain bender. The poem really made me think and look upon store bought foods in a new light.

This poem is unigue in its own right. It is fulfilling and has a sense of wonder though I would elaborate more upon it.

This poem should be used as a nonsmoking advertisement.

This poem is okay. It is like the narrator in the poem is dreaming of something the person can't seem to find.

It was a great story but you need to work more on description. You are forcing the reader to do to much work by minimal description. Even though minimal is favorable you have to be more clear. Other than that I enjoyed this story. I am a scifi junkie. Have a good laugh.

This was a good piece. However, you should develop it into something more.

This was an amazing story. The only thing I will suggest is you work on spelling. Other than that this had amazing clarity and I could sympathize with the main character. Keep up the good work.

I can't really give you a great critique. Everything was clear in the story. You certainly know how to hook a reader. During your battle scenes I felt like I was right there and possibly in a videogame. That is a compliment I am giving you. I can't wait to read the next Chapter in this. You should seriously consider getting this story published.