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AGE: 25
LOC: Greenville, SC
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: November 19

I am a survivor of sexual violence. While, no, that is not who I am, nor is it all that defines me, it is a large part of me as I have chosen to let it remain by writing and speaking against it’s presence in our schools. In addition to occasional entries on Urbis, you can also find my writing and artwork at endingsexualharassment.webs.com

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You think I lack Enough maturity Cause I won’t take Responsibility For everything That happens to me None of the facts You hear or see Because it was me It happened to You dismissed everything I said to you Clearly you find it Hard to believe That this is why I tried to leave You think I’m wrong for saying It wasn’t my fault The school forgot my rights Through it all I did everything I was able to do And I did it all Without help from you I know the difference between What&r...
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Poetry / Different Halls
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No matter what I’d say       Or what I’d do I just couldn’t       Get through to you You’d say you understand       How I feel But you don’t even understand       This is real I begged to move       Away from that school Where the teachers ignored       Words and actions cruel Just because with a smile   &...
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Quotes / Social Change
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The wonderful thing about social change is that, to be achieved, you have to piss people off once in a while
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Night comes again and with it the time to rest, but its spent instead wandering amongst the shadows... An unwelcome visitor. Leave me ALONE! A cold smile. Arms encircling. Hands roving. Break free Run...Run...Run... Empty halls Here. There. No one to help Busy. No time. Not my concern. Scared. Hurt. Angry There! "Please. Who do I go to for help?" "Me." I tell him what happened. A name. The arms. The hands. He nods. Makes a note. Doesn't move Still no one to turn to Sinking down, down, down. B...
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Journal, Diary, & Blogging / Nobody Knows
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Walking down Main Street so quiet and serious Then she waves and smiles to a friend in passing For a moment, its as if she's come alive Going through the workday hard-working, always ready to laugh Yet so much down-time is spent gazing at nothing, her eyes sad and distant Extra time spent on the computers at school headphones on, eyes glued to a project Another design forming on the screen Normal. Carefree. Going through the motions and nobody knows it but me Lying awake in her bed, waiting f...
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Poetry / Line of Clothes
From the beauty of a sunny, windy day to the horror of death as described in depressed trees, broken branches, and slaughtered fields of grass. Interesting, yet kind of morbid, on the thought of how drying laundry can make a person think of death. On context, the imagery was very good. Words like "skin", "emboldened sphere", "Lounging on a bed of sun rays", "faces in awe" are very well done. The action of lines like "branches break off" followed by "slamming" and "leaving" followed by "under ...
Sadness, loss, and love are the emotions I got most clearly from this. If this is cancer he/she's speaking of, I'd say he or she has resigned him/herself to dying. I'm sorry. On the poem, I especially liked the references to bubble gum and shoe strings. The ineffectiveness of such small tools makes more clear to me the image of a person falling into pieces--like trying to gum together the shards of a vase. I never visit graveyards--indeed I don't think I could stand to, but those two lines ab...
Poetry / Finding Love
Assuming this is within the confines of narrative poetry, I would address the rhythm--smooth it out, make it steadier. If you choose to rhyme, it also needs to be certain. Switching rhyme schemes is ok, but there needs to be a flow to it, even if you go back and forth among them. As for Gregory and Emma, congratulations and best of luck. Finally, the day cam --"came" She knew she has scored--"had scored" During this time she as mad--"was mad" She knew this love was ture and pure--"true" Nine ...
Quotes / Good writing
A simple, yet deeply-reaching concept. Good writing isn't always simple, but it is true that, if it doesn't matter to you, it's unlikely to touch the reader. Good job.
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