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Sci Fi & Fantasy / Duck
Version 1
4 Reviews   5 Comments
A man - an office drone, a nobody, just another bum-on-a-seat in the corporate world - finished work. He shut down his computer, locked the cupboard in his cubicle, put on his jacket. There was no-one but him left in the office... another day worked late with no over-time to show for it. On the way out, the man exchanged a nod with the security guard, Eric, who, despite having seen him every weekday for the last 10 years, still didn't know his name. His name is John, by the way, although we a...
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Sci Fi & Fantasy / the still room
Version 5
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The muffled thump of metal on metal. Again. A third time and the door buckles. A final blow and the thick metal door breaks from its hinges, falling into the room with a crash. Hard white light streams in through the doorway, silhouetting an enormous figure holding a heavy, steel battering ram. He steps back, disappearing into the spotlight glare. A second man steps into the light. He holds a terminal out in front of him and scans the room, its bright-green light blinking off-and-on, reflecti...
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Sci Fi & Fantasy / the still room
Version 4
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The muffled thump of metal on metal. Again. A third time and the door buckles, a piece of the lock flying off and hitting an overturned chair. A final blow and the thick metal door breaks from its hinges, falling into the room with a crash. Hard white light streams in through the doorway, silhouetting an enormous figure in a radiation suit carrying a heavy steel battering ram. The figure steps back, disappearing into the glare of the spotlights. A second figure, also wearing one of the bulky ...
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Sci Fi & Fantasy / Unit #335-07
Version 3
6 Reviews   7 Comments
He climbs, struggling not to lose his footing. The man stretches out a gloved hand and grabs a steel reinforcement-bar. It is one of many. They used to be buried deep inside concrete walls, now they are just another part of the devastation--convenient handholds in his search. The man hauls himself up onto the mountain of concrete. "Are you okay, Professor Steadman?" a voice crackles over the intercom. Professor Steadman stands and looks out across the ruined USAF base. He is breathing heavily...
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Sci Fi & Fantasy / Discovery
Version 2
5 Reviews   0 Comments
He struggles not to lose his footing. The man stretches out a hand, grabs hold of a long steel bar sticking out of the wreckage and hauls himself up onto steadier ground. The bar was once buried deep within thick concrete walls, reinforcing them, holding them up. Now it is just a convenient handhold for a stubborn old man. He should have let someone else do this. Someone younger. Someone fitter. He should be sat in the back of one of their air-conditioned trailers, watching via the suit's hea...
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Short Story / Metagaming
Overall, I liked it. It's an intriguing idea, but I did think there was room for more exploration of the idea. First, though, I did feel a bit of a contradiction. At the say this is Dave, Gary and Mike's 'traditional gaming night'. That makes it sound like Dave is a regular to the night and that he's fully happy to be there. It also paints him as a proper nerd/geek. However, later on he comes across as surly because it's a Friday night and he could be out picking up girls or specifically with...
Sci Fi & Fantasy / Brain Harvest
I think in some ways you rush a bit towards the twist revelations at the beginning. I think it would work slightly better if you had more of a 'ramping up' curve for them. In other words, start off more 'normal', describing the baking sun and him taking a break in slower time and then have the revelation that he's actually farming heads be more of a 'shock' revelation/twist. Then you have a bit more normal-ness - he maybe waters one of the heads and then the next one is 'ripe' and he harvests...
Took me a while to get it, if I'm honest. I mean, I got the idea that BDSM was Bondage, Dominance, Sadism & Masochism and I'm guessing the Minister is presumably unaware of this? What threw me was what _he_ thought it stood for - Baptist's Divorcees & Singles Mixer was my guess, but it took me a while to link the D&S to the acronym. You could simply spell it out in the text - have him thinking something like "That's it - a Baptist's Divorcees and Singles Mixer! Ideal!". This might also work i...
100.0% Review Quality (4 Votes)
Sci Fi & Fantasy / Untitled
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Sci Fi & Fantasy / Danjen, Rebel-At-Arms. Pt.2
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