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I saw your note about the formatting, which needs to corrected. Other than that, I understood your point and you flowed the poem quite well. I think I like the capitalization you used as I was reading. You were making a strong point, and it made me notice it more! Maybe you should think about keeping it.

Very good. I love poetry that flows well together, and this writing does. You did a good job hitting all the points you were trying to make. I enjoyed reading it and it touched me. I imagined myself thinking of heaven, and that is what you want from your readers. You want them to feel what you have written. Good job!