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AGE:
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LOC: Fontana, CA
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: May 23
LOC: Fontana, CA
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: May 23
I am a stay-at-home-mom, one little girl. I have wanted to write children stories since I was young.
I have ghastly grammar, my past,present and future tense sometimes are full of flaws. However everyday I am learning to strengthen these flaws.
I judge people’s work liberally. I either like something or don’t. I seldom hate someone’s work. So most of you may not like my liberal critism. It is not the “urbis” way. That’s just how I am. In other words: I like to be positive and uplifting unles you have gore in a children story, then I will come down on you hard.
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My Friend the Mouse Today I thought I saw a mouse. Look at all the things he brought into my house. Shiny things, stringy things, square boxes and paper things. Red paper clips, pieces of parsnips and even half-eaten potato chips. There’s a little mouse jacket hanging on the wall, blue and white mittens strewn down the hall. Boots are tossed under the chair and a hat lies at the top of the stairs. Muddy footprints are all over the floor, getting rid of this critter will be such a chore. When ...
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Life’s long journey marked; my road camouflaged simple with the end close by
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Gaze to the heavens, the colossal briny deep- embrace by its spell
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this is so cute but was disappointed in the ending I felt it ended abruptly, the tree needs to tell her why the leaves fall off or don't have him respond to the little girl.
I agree with your article. Nagin can only do what politicians do that is complain and point fingers. Nagin is not fit to be mayor in a crisis situation. I think our government and a lot of people where not prepared but refusing help that is just irresponsible. Oh well I hope he and Oprah will shut their flaps and stop making it look like it is all about racial discrimination.
Wow this is great! I felt like I was really there. It kinda of felt like I was in a black and white movie. Very intense between the two characters. I thought the dialogs was excellent. Are you going to add more to the story? Anyhow I really don't care if I get any credits for the review. I just wanted to give you a review keep in touch.
It's cute. I like the tiped like a cow and I died. I can visualize it. I would change the name of the title. Cute limerick.
This is not a good Haiku, it's not creative, I don't want to see in a Haiku, Leaves, decay into color and Fall. You've got to add more and be imaginative. Sorry if this is too critical.
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