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AGE: 45
LOC: Canada
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: September 16

My Name is Karen. I am 42. I am attempting to write a novel. Dead on Arrival. I have several ideas in the works—however I would really like to get this one off the ground. I belong to other groups on msn to have my work looked at. I don’t mind constructive criticism, just level my ego and dignity intact please. I recently started to dabble in poetry as well. I am not confident in this area yet but feed back so far as been pretty positive.
Besides writing, I do love to read. I also enjoy Playing on Pogo ==It’s great stress relief.

I am married with a teenaged daughter, and I have four grown step kids—all adults. We have 2 cats, and we live in Peterborough Ontario Canada.

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Chapter 6 Phil Vetters sat in the diner, waiting for his brother Vince to show up. Vince was the detective in charge of the recent murder of Dave Feener. Phil was thinking of the young comedian who had been murdered. He felt for the kid. What a loss. Dave had a marketable talent, but was sadly cut down way too soon. Phil would give everything he had to go five minutes with the killer. Vince was late, as usual. Phil couldn’t wait too much longer as he had a date with Peggy, his wife, bef...

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Chapter 4 Borneo and Lissa were driving back to the precinct, from the Laff Attak. Borneo was singing a bad version of Baba O’Riley. “Out here in the field, I fight for my meals. I put my back into my livin’ I don’t need to fight, to prove I’m right. I don’t need to be forgiven.” “Mike, please stop. Good thing you’re too old for American Idol. Simon Cowell would have a field day with you.” “Lissa, you wound me deeply. Here I th...

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Chapter 2 Two miles away, constables Mike Borneo and Lissa Cassway were on shift when the call came in. DB found in alleyway near Sutton and Frank; Stabbing. Meat wagon’s been called. Detectives are at scene. Please assist. Lissa responded and directed Borneo to the location. “Just when we thought it was gonna be a quiet one.” “What do you want Borneo? It’s Friday night in Edmonton. We’d wonder what had happened to the perps, if there wasn’t any cr...

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Prologue Present Day 2008 The glass slammed down on the bar. The barkeep filled the glass and passed it to the dude. “Good show” the bartender said, nodding to the comic on stage. “He’s okay, I have seen much better” The stranger replied. “You know comedy?” “I was comedy, years ago. Then I started my own club, hosted the best up-and-comers. I guided Carey, and Myers, on their way up. I was the Simon Cowell of the comedy world. I discovered more ...

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by butterfly323

I really related to this story. It is cute and humourous and anyone with Pets could see this. I have a slightly retarded cat at home so this really hit my funnybone. I wish you luck with this.

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by Lillie_M

Even though I hadn't read anything before this segment, I was pretty clear on the story. It was full of great dialogue --which is something i like in a story. I'd like to see where this goes. good luck! Ireally can't see any poroblems with the chapter.

by Anonymous

Okay so now I feel guilty. But I understand how you feel. I just have a hard time reviewing things in the middle of a book. I have few things that botehr me too so youaren't alone in your pet peeves. I won't go into detail because I don't want to cost you too many points

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