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AGE:
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LOC: United States
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: July 21
LOC: United States
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: July 21
I am new to URBIS, and I still can’t figure out what it means. I am an amatuer writer, but hope to one day be published. Please read and comment. Oh, and I don’t go on everyday, but, if you ask for one, I will accept any friend request. My lifes ambition is to become the worlds second greatest Creative writing teacher (Second only to Mrs. Necessary!). Don’t ask about the image. Please. Currently I’m typing multiple stories that I will ultimately post on URBIS! I’ve never revoked a review: Don’t make me start!
For those of you who know me, you know I’m really freakin’ tall, I love music and writing, I’ll do anything for a quick buck, I ride a unicycle, and I play the tuba.
Interesting for those of you who don’t know me, huh?
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“Everyone down!” I dreadnaught approaching!” a captain yelled as an enormous pitch-black airship flew over. Everyone ducked down to avoid being seen by the imperial airship. I hid behind one of the craggy sulfuric rock, my black uniform melting into the blackened rocks. The dreadnaught passed over harmlessly, apparently not seeing the remains of our army. Taylor crept over to me, his red cloak concealing no white hair. His eyes and nose were concealed in the shadow the hood...
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Don't you hate it- When you think something's going to happen, but it doesn't? When you think someone loves you, but they don't? When you delude yourself into thinking someone wants you, but they don't? When you do something irrevokable?
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You call me emo, You call me a freak, You say I'm depressed, You say I'm crazy. But really I'm not. In truth, I may be somewhat goth, somewhat freakish, occasionally deperessed, crazy when I feel like it. But I'm really just me. The guy you never see, long hair, crappy glasses, and most of all, I'm the person you never see.
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“No.” Her voice was as firm as steel. My heart was ice. It started with a cool splash of water as the words hit me. Then the water froze as the words struck home. “O…Kay…” I stammered as I slunk into the dark shadows of the “Out of Order” bathroom that was my solace. I kicked open the door to the handicapped stall, revealing, among other things, my lawn chair. I ran my finger over the track-pad on my laptop as I walked passed it. I grabbed the...
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A life is born, A future created. A life is born, Another destroyed. A life is, Another’s brightened. A life is born, Another’s darkened.
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Wow... The title was the only thing that didn't make much sense; you never said anything about valentintes day, as far as I could see. I think that this is a real glimpse into the world we know exists, but never want to see. Very well written
It'd be a lot better if there weren't so many french words. Us americans is stupid. (Before you ask, that was meant). The words kind of take away our understanding of what's happening. I liked this otherwise; beautifully written and a great plot. I can't wait to see those scumbags be ripped to shreds.
I'm curious to see where this will lead, and I think that you are gifted in a positive way. I really can't picture a teenager with an ankle pocket for their phone. I don't know, maybe it's just me. But please message me when the next part is done. I think the title is interesting though.
I'm not sure that I've ever met someone who goes out in the middle of the night to smoke. I just thought that you should know. I love how, in the last paragraph, he's like "You too,"... Very mysterious. I'd like to see if he came back.
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I really can't tell if this is like a preview of what ends up happening, or if it was the actual begining of the book. I did like it though; it looks like it could evolve into something worth reading.
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