All righty then. I usually start with a discussion of the conventions of written English as applied to your particular piece. In this piece, at least, you have demonstrated a great understanding of these rules, and I had no trouble understanding the tone, the mood or the atmosphere of the story. Kudos on a job well done. Next I will move to the writing itself; you have used a fairly descriptive language in this story, and your banter draws the reader into your particular brand of humor. I hea...

Very evocative, nice imagery. I notice a typo or two, maybe get a proofreader to go over it for you. The overall effect is nice, the ending brings it all home. The middle may be shortened, you dwell on the rain a lot. I felt the metaphors for rain were maybe a bit overdone, I guess. Take these two stanzas: "Summer showers fall, to cool the thickened air. No lights shine, from the burdened sky. Clouds blanket the stars, They echo each drops that falls." Don't they seem to say almost the same t...

Seldom enough weight in six words.

Very descriptive style, you handle the conventions well. Your prose puts the reader in the story, I could see the house, the chair, the dog playing with the boy etc. I did not much enjoy the story, maybe I missed something. I usually look to be edified by what I read, beside the skill with which it was written, this seems to have no redeeming qualities. I was looking for a lesson, a moral, something to make the pain of a dog bite, the loneliness of three people together yet still separate wor...

Better than most, good for you.

Cute, but not really very important. There are a few misspelled words too. Like six of them.

Very nice. This has a lot to say about you as an author, and about your life. Nicely done! Is there a reason you capitalized the whole thing? It seems more like a title than a six word essay.

Sorry, this made absolutely no sense. I got neither character development, nor plot. I didn't find anything in this that would induce me to go on, and in fact, I will now avoid your stories, for fear of wasting my time on a random selection of poorly described events. Dude, your imagination rocks, now control the part that tells stories, and make some sense so your readers are not permenantly lost trying to decypher your events.

You may be able, eventually, to get this kind of story published, but there are some things you will need to do first. The most important is to get a good grammar guide and learn the conventions of modern written English. This is poorly done in terms of the grammar used, I could rewrite it with the correct grammar, but you want to do that yourself since there are several decisions to make as you go. If I did this it would be my story, not yours. The next thing would be to be more concrete in ...