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I’m a fifty-year old art teacher/artist/photgrapher/writer. I’ve been barely published and am working on it all the time. I just left an extended exile of practice, practice, practice and am now ready to return to the market. Any help is appreciated.

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Sci Fi & Fantasy / Isis Wept, Chapter 7
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Chapter Seven Horror is a contextual thing. Hammamiya lay in ruins, black smoke rolling off its remains. Its citizens bobbed face down in the river, bloated, jammed-up feasts for crocodiles. The stink of the place sickened the refugees and the blood from it sickened the already wilted land. But misery comes in worse packages, as the fugitives from Set soon learned. Across the river, almost within sight of the stricken city, Badari thrived. Boats ran, the waterside market was filled with crowd...
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Sci Fi & Fantasy / Isis Wept, Chapter 6
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Sanni was ready to go. Her children were rested, and so might walk a while on their own. Yesterday her arms had flamed by evening as she carried first one and then the other baby away from the corpse of Mahasna. She had ignored their laments of tired feet and hungry bellies until they were miles from the burned-out town. The girls had complained too stridently to feel her consuming fear; they hadn’t noticed the hints of death peeking from still-smoking doorways. Hordedev was a different matte...
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Sci Fi & Fantasy / Isis Wept, Chapter 5
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Qebera struggled up yet another dune, the sand shifting under his weight, as supportive, he cursed, as water. He glanced over his shoulder to where they ought to be and, yes, they pursued him, two dunes back, though their numbers seemed fewer than the last time he’d checked. Maybe they planned some ruse to ensnare him, a flanking effort to get around front. It didn’t matter, not anymore. He was far beyond strategy. That luxury had deserted him two days back when he had lost his men to a Setim...
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Sci Fi & Fantasy / Isis Wept, Chapter 4
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The next several days were a hemorrhage of grief for Abydos. After Set’s initial attack, several ships out of Abu Simbel docked at the city’s moorings and disgorged their Setim cargoes. The invaders had been anchored miles upstream, and beset the city like some awful communal nightmare. They set aflame the great temple of Osiris and smashed every altar erected to him in every house and in every street. The workman-clerics of those altars were dragged from their homes and gutted, their familie...
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Sci Fi & Fantasy / Isis Wept, Chapter 3
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Isis Wept, Chapter 3 Isis staggered, almost collapsing. She had been walking the edge of her roof, a moment’s self-collection after just returning home. If not for her attending priestess, she might have fallen to the courtyard below. “Goddess!” Merferet gasped, hauling her queen from the precipice. She quickly, contritely, released Isis’s arms. “Goddess, forgive me! Are you all right?” Isis settled to the mudbrick roof. She trembled, and her body ran with sweat. “I felt something,” she said,...
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Crime, Thrillers & Mystery / Not Yet Titled (Chapter I)
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Short Story / A Perfect Zero
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Not a criticism, but a suggestion: in the recap, you could just give a short paragraph that touches the main events, then list the characters the reader should know for the upcoming chapter, along with a phrase that encapsulates who they are. I mentioned this before, so I'll reiterate briefly: I think the rapid-fire scene and timeframe changes do not do the story justice. They give it the feel of several disjointed vignettes rather than one cohesive story. I particular, the lack of transition...
This is a fine poem as far as it goes. Personally, I would have liked to see a little more interaction before the ending won out. I would like to have seen a description of the woman, or at least of what caused her to attract the narrator's attention. I would have appreciated a more visual, and thematically suggestive description of what did or did not come across her face before she chose to ignore the person. These things could add more meat and depth to the idea. As is, what you have is a ...
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Poetry / Goodbye Grandma
A solid descriptive, introspective poem, especially as regards the use of remembered visuals to illustrate the emotional content of the work. The end is very appropriate, especially with contrast between the mourning mood at the graveside and the more adventurous, playful mood of the boy just beyond, a juxtaposition that comes close to giving a lie to the idea of mourning being both universal and personal.