well what can i say.. at first glance... it's a beautiful story... it has emotion, a scene put to words perfect enough for me to picture it myself... and it is sad.. the title Happy Ending with a question mark basically sums up the idea I think.. sure he's dead.. and he sees his girlfriend/wife again.. but he's dead.. just the subject of suicide alone brings up controversy ( a perfect way to show that controversy and that you, as the writer, are aware of it with the question mark.)... my cont...

awesome and true.. which is i guess what haikus are all about... there's always something scarier and bigger..

sweet... this is my kind of poetry... cynical with a hint of feeling... nice rhyme scheme... He turned to heroine, she now was his wife She screwed him too and took his life i think this would help the flow a little better if you put... she screwed him too and she took his life that'll keep the syllable count more in sync with the other stanzas... awesome job.. i think our tastes are a little similar... add me and we can give eachother more feedback...

i appreciate the passion and anger in this piece... it is true.. many of these revolution heads don't have any idea what they are talking about.. what is cool to them is only what every one else in their blogosphere or classroom thinks is cool.. p.s. i'm far from a supporter of che guerra. i believe his only true motive was to reap power for himself... the guy wanted to start world war three and spread communism all over the world.. but this is a very good piece and u stick to your guns, whic...

this gives me the chills.. i've lost close friends... i've known those who've taken their own lives.. there isn't colorful language and such to dress up the piece.. you left the bare necessities... that's what i like best. .........p.s. - as you yourself are obviously a much more experienced writer, please do not take this review as something that i believe should be valuable... ....I'm more looking for your input on my work...

very true... perhaps that you shouldn't do the same as someone else did before you?

i like it alot. its very eduational. it gives me a new understanding of this disease witha ll the detail given. this is written from a male perspective and i must say you have seriously moved me though i can never know what your pain is like. the way you feel about this i can relate to my point of view. i also know the feeling of having a long-term diesase, having to take pills that make you sick as hell... it is concluded very well. awesome job.

chilling.. i sense a doomed relationship where the narrator is treated wrongly, maybe abused, by another.. her lust is only fueled by the abuse and wrongdoings to him/her... love it. i honestly cant say i see anything wrong in it... due to my taste in poetry that is short and snappy but still incredibly powerful and smart... every line ended in a word that one could look at without reading the rest and still get the meaning of the poem... i think its perfect. people who'll tell you theres any...

wow.. you have serious skill with words.. rhyming as many as four words together.. while most people would sacrifice quality and power of words with heavy rhyme.. you only make the words more powerful.. my favorite line would have to be "to tantalize me with precious preachings of pronounced prose". you've inspired me to write something similar.. im slightly confused with the ending.. however as i read it over i realize it talks about how your love and muse may have left.. but another may com...

we are now just nightmares on freedom-fried TVs i don't know if you were mentioning this with the "freedom-fried" adjective to express the idea that the two lovers' deaths are now part of a propaghanda machine.. but if you were, i love it.. very subtle way of going about it.. all while immediately tying it in with a tear-jerking, somewhat haunting conclusion.. i'm not sure if it would be lame but maybe instead of "lets ditch this joint baby." you could add a quote from t2 that only those who'...