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AGE: 49
LOC: United Kingdom
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: October 15

These pieces are simple for others to read. I don’t want to try and make any money from them, so they will never be published.
Generally I have been writing for many years and have built up a huge pile of stories. This is the only way they will ever live in the imagination of others. So I submit my works to be reviewed, not to be given a little life before they disappear forever. Steve.

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Synopsis: Lottery Dreams Lottery Dreams is the title of a novel I’m thinking of publishing on this site. If you want to know more, please stay tuned. Steve. This is the story of a group of simple working class men who win the lottery. You follow them on their adventure through the hell of factory life, with its crushing boredom, to the heady heights of having more money than they can spend. Throughout all this lurks the sinister figures who really run the world, granting the men their fortune...

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WORKING TITLE: MISSING WIFE Ten years later there she was. I was sitting at the hotel bar when I saw her. The hotel was a good one, in a small market town in the East Midlands called Stamford. The only reason I stop to think about the location, is due to the irony of it. I had lived here since my early childhood, and went to school nearby.Over the years I have travelled all over the world, but always to come back and settle once again in England. Eventually, I come back to in Stamford. As I ...

Amuse / Entertain / Warm a few hearts

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by drowsingmuse

Great I really like it! You really had me in that place putting the guy behind the locked door. Of course we all want to know now what he did and why they wanted to lock him away? And what was the magic mind reading thing he does? It’s tough to cover any science fiction story now with the hit TV series Heroes, but they is still a lot of ground to be cover by good writers. The story is good and could really work once you have the other chapters. Look forward to reading more. Steve

by Phantom

I liked it. I thought you should have included the reason why they were running a little more, to add tension to the story, but overall I thought it worked really well. You might get a whole heap of criticism saying you should do this or that. But to be honest, if you feel the story is moving at the pace you are happy with, don’t take any notice. There is nothing worse than having people put you off only to find you are not interested in your own work. If the story works in your own head, tha...

by Anonymous

I like it! I’m hardly qualified to talk on this subject as I’ve never written any lyric of any sort. So I think it takes guts to put something like this down on paper. The little I know about it, is that certain images come forward with a strong meaning. And I certainly felt strong images coming forth. If they were in a song, you would certainly remember them in the riff. If you are troubled by critics, my advice is ignore them. No one ever built a statue to a critic. Steve

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by decemberskye

I really enjoyed this and I never read any Romance as a rule! I was truly there in that room listening to them argue, and I really felt for that poor girl as she had the tables turned on her. The only points i picked up on were that i think you should leave the swearing until it really peeks, to add more punch. But remember a lot of software will weed it out for attention, so if you can get away without it, why not try? Also remember these pages are looked at by a lot of us outside the US so...

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