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AGE: 28
LOC: Payson, UT
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: September 07

I am a 27 year old married mother of two young children. I love to write, I have been writing since I was a kid.  My mom of course thinks I am very talented (but she’s biased, don’t tell anyone).  Doing this was a hard decision for me.  I am, unfortunately, not as thick-skinned as someone needs to be who wants to write. It is my very biggest flaw..I hope by submitting work here I can develop a better appreciation for “constructive criticism”.  My brain is constantly churning out story ideas. I have probably hashed out, printed, then deleted and burned 100 or more novels in the last five years alone. (I am my biggest critic, and easily throw out stuff that might have had a chance if I had not re-read it) I hope my work is, if nothing else…

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Short Story / That's my man
Version 2
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My husband is a food nazi. That is the nicest thing I can say about his little problem. The man will blow his wad weekly on shit that any dietican would groan at. Chips, ice cream, fried everything. He won't eat lettuce unless it is hidden under a McBurger. Still, it's not really his tastes that concern me. It's his obsession with what is his. We share everything. It is one of the fine print things that is written on the back of every marriage license, but when it comes to food, my husband ha...
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Novel Treatments / Title is currently under construction
Version 2
4 Reviews   4 Comments
Chapter One The Chase Elohir’s heart was pounding as he hurdled over a fallen tree. He could still hear the booming voices of the men behind him. Fast on his heels. He could hear the thunder of horses hooves. The cacophony of the assembly behind him, broke through the woods, and echoed off the still silence of the trees. If he hadn’t known precisely where they were were he might have thought they were ahead of him, or even all around him. Their voices were everywhere, bellowing human voices r...
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Novel Treatments / The Sons of Easros (working title)
Version 1
5 Reviews   8 Comments
Angud “Our day has finally come brother.” Oveila mused, as she dragged the long trained fur across the bedchamber.. “It feels like a lifetime has been erased with the passing of the old man’s reign.” A look of satisfaction crossed Oveila’s wickedly beautiful features. “Soon everything we have waited for will come to pass.” Angud nodded assent although he remained silent. It was always best to let Oveila talk. She was much wiser than he, that he was sure of, and besides it made him feel good ...
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Novel Treatments / God Complex Chapter 3
Version 2
3 Reviews   3 Comments
Chapter 3 Rylee had a case file that was as thick as a dictionary under one arm, and a cup of coffee that was leaking, in spite of the lid. The strap of her purse dangled in the crook of her other arm, weighing her down in a way that she could not appreciate. She was grateful that she had chosen black slacks at the last moment, as the hot, wet sensation of spilled coffee was radiating from both legs. She wasn’t normally late. As a rule, she hated tardiness, in herself and especially in others...
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Poetry / The Brink
Version 1
7 Reviews   1 Comment
I burn like a over-dried twig with too many crusted leaves; twisted and frail.... I ache like a piece of twine that has been twisted too tightly The air I breathe like a wet rag..Sodden...dank....cold... This cocoon of flesh torments me: I want to claw off every piece of my skin, snap my tendons, burst my veins and break my bones... Can't fight, can't win...Like a cornered deer... A snared fox....A caged sparrow.... My heart is fluttering, pumping, hurting.... Nothing eases the constant assa...
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Sci Fi & Fantasy / Jester (Revised II)
by PeanutButter
I enjoyed reading this, it seems like you have a really good plot in mind, and I really think it would make a great story. Your characters are interesting, and you seem to have a clear idea of who they are and what you want them to do, that is a great start. As far as pace goes it feels a little rushed, you have a lot to work with here, yet it feels like you are flashing right through it. Slow down and take some time to really flesh out Razine and Makoto's physical apperance, their mood, thei...
Poetry / Jax
by Sunday
I enjoyed reading this it has a nice flow, and the subject is bittersweet and a good read. Some of the structure is off, and you are missing some punctuation, but otherwise I thought it was well written. "and it wasnt long before you pulled my friend" I'm not sure what this line means. Pulled away maybe? You seem very in control of what you want to say with this piece, and I think it came across very nicely. I think this is good, you have a good sense of poetry and it's purpose and I think yo...
Lyrics / Attempt at folk song lyrics
by Ramblin_Jack
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Short Story / Harvest of Sorrows
by Fiso
I think you have a great writing style, and this was a good read. I don't really think this works as a short story. There is no resolution at the end. You have a lot to work with here, and I think it could go a lot further than what you have. Perhaps into an entire novel? If you want it to remain a short story you will need to restructure it so that there is an ending. What happens to Tsitsi and her son? What happens to Benjamin in the mines? You have a good story here I think, it just needs ...
Horror / Bound By Blood: Prologue
by draculachronicles
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