Oh sweet Jesus that's sad. But, it really speaks to how healing human contact can be for some people. Unfortunately we live in a throw away society and people can easily cast you aside when they find out that you are sick. It's so sad that we'd rather warehouse our sick and elderly than to take care of them. I wonder if that's how "he" felt. And if "she" was his friend, how come she didn't know that he was living in a nursing home. I can't imagine how she must have felt. Being surrounded by d...

This has the perfect feel and pitch of those Film Noir movies with the really bad music. All of the women had their hair in the perfect style with that one big wave in the back, and they were always being interviewed for something. There always that one dim light shining overhead and the use of light and dark and shadows played on the screen. Then there's the uber corny private eye. He's the one that thinks he cool. That has this horrible Peter Faulkner accent when he talks. He's going to sol...

Yes, this piece does make sense. In true flash fiction form, it makes me want to ask questions. Like, why did Barney and Chris have all of these drugs and money in the house, or are they the muscle for some drug lord? Why would Barney leave Chris alone and come back up the hill when he knew full well they were planning a hit? Who is this mysterios jogger? Was this Barney's way of a assisted suicide? Was it him that stole the drugs and the fear that he would get caught lead him to this? I didn...

Growing old sucks, doesn't it. It's too bad that he can't see all of the things he's gaining now in his old age, instead of losing. In youth, you may have a six pack and a head full of thick hair, and big legs and no wrinkles. But you were also dumb as a box of rocks. With age comes wisdom and I think that makes us sexier. I wonder, is the title symbolic of the impending midlife crisis that he's about to embark on? I didn't catch any grammatic errors and the timing of the poem flowed well. I ...

They trust you, too, eh? I thought I was the only trust worthy one. Does anyone ever fall for these scams? Are people really gullible to believe that some guy in some jail in some country that you can't get any information about will give you millions of dollars if you just basically give up your identity? Really? Is it that easy? I found this to be very funny, and oh so true. It's really sad what people will do in order to doop everyday citizens. I only noticed one spelling issue. You have "...

You make very valid points. Racism is stupid. However the way you started this, I thought you were going to talk about them as seperate entities, not as one being the result of the other. Unfortunately no matter where you're from, this country or another racism exists on some level. There's nothing wrong in having pride in your race, but when you breed hate and distrust for people you don't know, I agree there is a problem. I just hate everyone equally. I'm an equal opportunity hater. Our soc...

I think you summed up Darren's life beautifully with this statment : "The similarities between himself and the machine didn't escape him." He must feel like such an imposter. He must feel like he has to be everything to everyone, and never what he truly is. He must feel like he's second best. Almost as good as the real thing. Even if people love him and tell him he's great. It's not the same. It must be hard for him to be in his line of work and hate people. Especially with a person that feel...

How cute. I love the southern accent and the broken deep south speak. Really leads to the poverty stricken area and the narrator's lack of education. Not that people from the south aren't smart, but you get what I'm saying. As far as the way it was written, the only thing I had to reread was when he was talking to the kid. Since when he was talking to him there were no quots, I thought at first he was reflecting on it. Then I read it again and it appeared he was talking to someone. You may wa...

Oh, that's sad. Reminds me of Legends of the Fall when Tristen comes back from sea to find Julia Ormonds character married to Alfred. Even though he knew that it was his fault for being gone so long, and she's happy and moved on, it still hurts to know what they gave up. This gives me the same emotions. My only concern is the amount of run on sentences and uses of semicolons where there should be a new sentence. I think some careful punctuation editing would clean that right up. Great job!