Although I do not agree with some of your views, I will not be bias. This article is suberbly written, and really makes the read think. Outstanding job.

Outstanding piec, but a bit too descriptive for my taste. Good work!

Excellent flow. Good work! Spelling needs a bit of work, though.

Excellent piece, I enjoy poetry that can break from the mainstream. Very unique, very artistc. Thanks for sharing.

I realize that my criticism may be harsh, but I firmly believe that true criticism is the only way for someone to improve. Allow me to begin. The only good I could find was some decent description, yet you should still use more. I don't know what the place looks like, I don't know what you or Beth look like, not even hair color. In other words, this completely lacks charectar description. This seems more like a diary entry of a junior cheerleader in highschool, very judgemental and ignorant. ...

Excellent story. It outlines something that many writers forget- a medium of description. You described enough to give me your personal view of the event, yet at the same time you left enough room for my imagination to take hold. Well done.

This is an outstanding piece. I never grade a 10, I don't believe any work is beyond improvement- however I myself can't see what to change. Well done!

Oustanding piece! It definately brings to the surface the typical writer's chaotic mind- we think of something as simple as "Liar Liar" and go off on a total tangent. Well done!

Outstanding piece. Your use of description is a perfect medium- you give the reader room to imagine yet you still convey your own vision. Thank you for sharing.