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AGE: 23
LOC: United States
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: September 29

Name’s Eric Stauffer. I’m in England with the US Air Force as a military cop. For more go to my profile on myspace:

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Short Story / "The Hopeless Novel"
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"The Hopeless Novel" by Eric Stauffer Pen against the naked, mocking paper, his hand froze. The pen simply wouldn't move. 'Come on, Tom. You can do this. Focus.' Lighting a Marlboro, he stared at the paper in the same manner a boxer stares down his opponent before a fight. The sounds of the diner- soft convorsation, an infant crying, the occasional breaking glass- faded into a dull drone. 'Focus.' The immobile bic ballpoint, refusing to budge, was now angrily pressing an indent into the page,...
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Short Story / "Swift Judgement"
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"Fast Food" by: Eric Stauffer Twirling a lock of golden blonde hair around her finger, Kelly sighed. "Wanna supersize that?" she asked, the question mechanical. "Uhh... sure." the fat balding man dropped a crumpled ten into her outstretched hand. "Need a number three!" she shouted over her shoulder. Counting his change, she turned her attention back to her customer only to find him blatently staring at her chest. Disgusted, she spilled his change all over the counter, folding her slender arms...
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It seems like a distant memory- the blood, the screams, the confusion... I was sitting in the backseat of our old Chevy station wagon, chewing a piece of peppermint gum as I let my parent's convorsation fade into a dull drone. Staring out the backseat window, I was thinking about how I would spend this carefree summer day. A warm June breeze hit my face and I smiled. Life was good. The next thing I remember was being loaded into the back of an ambulance, the metallic taste of my own blood fil...
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Short Story / ImPulse
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Gazing out of his fifth floor apartment window, the old man watched a young boy feed pigeons at a small park. It was a typical November morning in Philadelphia, a thin sheet of gray clouds covering all but a few scattered flecks of blue. The milky white light was harsh on the old man's eyes. He took a deep breath, followed by the familiar coughing and gasping, testament to his tarred and diseased lungs. Lighting an unfiltered Pall Mall, he reflected upon his own childhood as he watched the y...
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Novel Treatments / A Chance Meeting
Outstanding piece. Your use of description is a perfect medium- you give the reader room to imagine yet you still convey your own vision. Thank you for sharing.
Oustanding piece! It definately brings to the surface the typical writer's chaotic mind- we think of something as simple as "Liar Liar" and go off on a total tangent. Well done!
This is an outstanding piece. I never grade a 10, I don't believe any work is beyond improvement- however I myself can't see what to change. Well done!
Short Story / The Approaching Storm
Excellent story. It outlines something that many writers forget- a medium of description. You described enough to give me your personal view of the event, yet at the same time you left enough room for my imagination to take hold. Well done.
Short Story / Where Will I Be
I realize that my criticism may be harsh, but I firmly believe that true criticism is the only way for someone to improve. Allow me to begin. The only good I could find was some decent description, yet you should still use more. I don't know what the place looks like, I don't know what you or Beth look like, not even hair color. In other words, this completely lacks charectar description. This seems more like a diary entry of a junior cheerleader in highschool, very judgemental and ignorant. ...
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