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AGE: 20
LOC: Coarsegold, CA
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: May 06

hi I’m courtney, I’m 17. thats all you really need to know…

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I'm caught up in a swirl of these windswept spring days the smoke lifting the hair blown and we are blown away blown so very far away but another hour passes and the daylight fades further further longer longer "faster, faster" a shade crosses into our path and I yell: save me from the shadow save me from the darkness just save me because in the light we live we are born and we will never die on these spring days so stay stuck just like today let it last forever let me last forever in the lig...
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lipstick stains on the collars of business men in blue suits they dream up their american dreams their naivety hangs like the stench on the curtins its stuck it will never come out the blood is everywhere the blood is fucking everywhere they panic i'm quiet i'm quiet but i want to laugh at the poor carpet salesman passed out lying next to a dead girl bleeding on the hosts new rug and this party just became a party a woman in the corner just says just says "oh dear, that will never come out" o...
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i could paint this whole world red so red that it makes your eyes hurt you 'd squint to hide from youself would it ever even matter? would the paint make a difference? now the brush strokes are dancing on the skin its funny how we dance to the same beat thinking they are completely different news flash an epiphany and the color i so fondly thought of as red was really just grey in disguise the confusion making me take a breather (inhale) (exhale) into the a night of color, music and just the ...
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I'm going to sew your fucking mouth shut thats what i said in all ease and integrity this should have be been spoken ages ago during the first time this was thrown in the air I'm going to vomit from the stench I can't get you out of my skin shut up shut up shut up I'm going to walk out of this room and right into another one just like it with someone just like you someone just like me it's all grey grey just like me
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you're fond of capturing the moment and I wonder if this picture will be your funeral picture the perfect one to show the perfect you is my voice dripping with sarcasism? every pronunciated word I speak, another witty remark? I hope so I hope you are taking it all in... instead of taking up the space with your empty words and you're speaking again aren't you? you will never learn so you say... it was fun it was great those nights doing nothing at all if they were so great... then why do I wis...
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wow... this is pretty damn amazing. I love content and the way it flows. I love the second stanza the most. everything is so simple but still says a lot. so good job. it's nice.
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I like it, it's short and sweet. but the voice of it sounds kind of dull...
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this is very good. and it has a message that most everyone can relate to. the second line in the first stanza is my favorite. it's beautiful. i cant really think of anything to say about you changing it. its pretty much perfect the way it is.
Poetry / Anticipation
yeah it's pretty random.. it flows alright. but i kind of think it needs something. some work to it. I really like the.."Anticipation, The enemy Of relaxation." part... very nice job on that part... I think you might need to work on your line breaks. they are kind of obscure.. and also punctuation... but that ones not a necessity.
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