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Some of this sounded a little confused to me. Ranging back and forth in time with "rhyme or reason" confused me. I cannot tell if the clock had flowers on it or if you were in Paris. Part of the confusion comes from saying you were very young and in the next breathe/stanza, saying you were 40. Still, very good imagery, I could see the flowers.

Very moving. When you get to the four stanza, it seems a little...off. painting fingernails, pumping iron...from everything else, it seems more life changing, these two things don't really change your reality. Maybe if this was at the beginning, as in building up to life changing events. It does create a lot of images (which I love) and a lot of thought provoking ideas. Thanks, Mo, now write more!

True, in a sense. Though the ghost would have to be thinking of the items. Or at least, that's what the "experts" say. Just imagine if you could see all that..ugh! Decent quote, but do bedding and towels die?

Two things...I don't believe that for publication, you can use Prozac without permission. Second, the last line doesn't flow as well as it could. I don't know how you could change it. But! I do agree! lol. Herbal healing is better than prozac!