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This was very good. The imagery you created through the use of metaphor was truly excellent. While the concept is old, the twist that the ending brought...the apathetic attitude of the angle of death...was very enjoyable. The second paragraph is by far the best of the entire story. You should write about that woman. I am sure she also has a story to tell.

Haha. That was pretty good. I really enjoyed the tone that you used at the beginning and ending of the story-- it tied everything together very nicely. One suggestion though is to clarify the "north and south" bit in the third paragraph of the aliens response. It might be somewhat confusing for international readers. Overall the concept was very well executed.

Wow. You really hit something with this. You can clearly sense the longing in the the narrator's voice. It is an interesting contradiction to think that something good is destined to happen yet the timing is unknown...usually it is the opposite. I think a good title for this would be something to highlight that...maybe "Fate gone astray" or something like that.