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AGE: 29
LOC: Reseda, CA
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: July 30

I’m here to get better as a writer.
Somewhere along the line, make friends.
Have a few a drinks and just let the mind wander for days on end.
Sometimes it returns.
More often than not, it never does.

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Novel Treatments / PainKillers.
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Part I: Ignoratio   1. Her name is Heather. She doesn’t say much when I first enter the cab. She sits, twiddling a lock of her short light brown hair around her slender knotted fingers. She flashes a half-smile as I take my seat, the cold leather sagging and grunting beneath my weight. I fiddle with the dial on the headphones, adjusting the volume to an escapist’s ideal. Lose myself to the forbidden drumbeats and blaring guitars of songs that help me to forget. I shake my he...
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Query Letter / Query- PainKillers.
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Mr. Laghi, Fuck this perfect little world. Do you know what it’s like to deal with afflictions of addiction and rotting cynicism? Do you? Do you know what it’s like to wake up every morning and find that everything you thought you knew has been stripped from your very essence? Within the confines of my own addiction, I struggle to understand just why she left, what exactly it is that I did. Fuck this perfect little world.  You want the truth about existence? Then look at you...
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Novel Treatments / PainKillers.
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2 Reviews   7 Comments
Part I: Ignoratio   1. Her name is Heather. She doesn’t say much when I first enter the cab. She sits, twiddling a lock of her short light brown hair around her slender knotted fingers. She flashes a half-smile as I take my seat, the cold leather sagging and grunting beneath my weight. I fiddle with the toggle on the headphones, adjusting the volume to an escapist’s ideal. Lose myself to the forbidden drumbeats and blaring guitars of songs that help me to forget. I shake my ...
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5 Reviews   4 Comments
There's a stranger sitting in my usual stool at the Lion's Head. I haven't seen him before, but I recognize the shirt he wears: a red t-shirt with an imprinted orange life vest on it and a monogram bearing the word 'Alvarez'. I order another San Mig. Having been claimed by this delectable elixir, I find it difficult to order anything but. "I've seen those shirts everywhere. What's it mean?" He munches on a handful of oriental crackers and nurses a draught Heineken. "Our whole family came. So ...
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White light spills through the portholes on the heavy steel double doors, casting two perfect circles on the floor before us. Danny had to smuggle me down there, five decks below the Lion's Head, taking me through dark halls and steep stairwells. "Too many cameras", he had said gesturing to the little red lights in the darkness as we pass two in a darkened corridor. Danny new these paths well, having spent eighteen years on the same ship you get know all its nooks and crannies. He knew every ...
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Query Letter / Query_Letters For Jill
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Short Story / Culprit and Victim
First thing I noticed- If his name is George Hig, why isn't he referred to by his last name? George, Geoffry, and Maxwell monikers for this character are a little too much. Pick a name and stick with it. Watch parentheses as they are usually worthless. Um... interesting vampire story, but I was having trouble pegging as being early 19th century or early 20th century. Some of the lingo and phrasing seems to place it around the 1800's but there were other parts that made if feel like it was tak...
Flash Fiction / Summer Broke
Check your tensing in the fourth line; that colon is throwing me off. Feels like I'm reading it wrong. Misspelling on "Successful". Tight and concise.
I'm not really sure what the satire is here as far as metaphors for the degeneration of America go, but it did have me chuckling with the absurdity of the situation. It was well written, tight and concise. I've never really thought of Americans as being uptight workaholics afraid of procreation. The metaphor seems to be more in line with the Religious Right than American culture as a whole. If this is where your metaphor lies, you may want to fine tune it a bit.