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AGE: 22
LOC: Bridgewater, MA
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A Constant War, Waged Against Mediocrity
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I need a girl with unremarkable vision. Through the blurred steamed mirror Of the post shower bathroom The smeared subway window's reflection Or the blackness of a television screen I acquire those classic good looks. The flaws upon my face erase. The imprefections in my hair fade Into the shell of my original intent. Astigmatism fills the gaps in my teeth And My jaw squares up. The muscles in my arms remain, Outshining any excess on my stomache and neck. How unfortunate To be placed in this ...
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The road, finally forking Revealing all to be clear All things, once given They are not welcome here. For now I’m endowed with brand new sight Seduced by the left, but headed right. These wings, hard earned, Now I am taking flight For even the darkest says Have their nights. When taken from The highest shelf Love’s high will cause you, To lie to oneself. Though confessions under a dying light Where true colors always show bright All I needed wrong, Proved right. But even the darkest days, Hav...
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ONLY AS A CONCEPT The more you get to know me The less affection, You will be able to muster. I lie to the faces Of those closest to me. I maintain a healthy, Conservative diet Then drink myself into oblivion. I crave faith, Something to believe in But have nothing, And have no one. I have been battered into bitterness And harvest disgust, At others’ happiness. I see the worst in people Their pretense sickens me. I pull masks off and see The bone underneath, Crumble upon the weight. If for on...
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RIGHT WHERE I STARTED I arose like the phoenix, Snorting the ash up, like a fine drug. I battered down my burden, With a shovel called hope. Buried your memory Underneath a pile of desire. Then, I slit the wrists Of a pen gone dry, and Watched as it gushed upon the page. With an oil tycoon’s smile I realize, That, right where I started Might not be so bad, After all.
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This is great stuff, you get a great feel of the author's mind set, the bacon sizzling on god's skillet, very nice. I would maybe suggest a verse about the situation he's in, maybe how or why he's there, however I'm not sure if it doesnt work better ambiguous like it is, leaves a little to the imagination. Either way this is good stuff, well done.
the other ones were great and very funny, this one just comes off a little bitter.
solid gold, especially the last one. I like how your start off with a real one and then dive into the humor. Your parodies are worth more than half of the six word memoirs, more than half
This is just great, especially the second to last one, this should be publish right next to the list of the ones that get published....actually the second one is probably my favorite
I liked this, found it very amusing, despite the fact that I did do a six word memoir. I love seeing the people who joined this site just for the sake of getting one of them in their, kind of takes away the whole point of it. This little piece does a very good job of putting the whole thing in perspective, comically. Good stuff
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