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AGE:
42
LOC: United States
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: November 14
LOC: United States
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: November 14
I have many passions including the ocean, SCUBA, exploring: the outdoors, the unknown, ancient civilizations and the paranormal. However, my number one passion in life is MUSIC. I have been writing poems and lyrics since I was twelve years old and have received four monthly “Editor’s Choice” awards and nominations for many more.
Thought I would try it out here and see what kind of reviews I get, as well as, review others.
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(Hook) I've got to step back from everything and become who I am again. (Background) Negative tendacies, negative influences negative, negative, negative. Sucked me dry, till I'm ash inside. There's nowhere left to hide. (chorus=hook + background) Time to face my demons. Face them with brute force. Time to take them down and get back on course. (chorus) Stop your lies and my cries. Start living instead of existing. No more.. negative tendacies, negative influences No more.. nega...
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Hook: Here's some news, unaware, you lose, me.. I"m soooo amused. You fell for sure, still you lied, alluding to your wicked pride. Left us hanging, by a thread of hope, dangling without rope. Exalted we held you, such talent, passion and all day thrashin'. You did it to us all you know, me, her, them... and soooooo chorus: Hope you had fun, the likes of which there's no compare around the bend, hooves barreling down, fair is fair for the seeds you sowed an...
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(Hook) Always the same, your charming ways, words you say. No, it never changes, You alwayyyysss get your prey. (chorus) whomever you set your sights on tonight you know is yours, they never put up a fight so entranced, are they, so quickly, fall prey hells spell for you and your demonic way Watching you is like learning from a master. Poor little girls intent on playing with disaster. They know not, what demon stands before them. Eyes barely focused on this, star st...
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Like, lust, love; humiliate, hurt, hate.
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I am passionate. There is one thing I love most. Music holds the key.
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the claroty is not clear to me and the flow could be better. The imagery is really good so I guess the challenge then is to use the imagery to improve on the clarity. Maybe add a couple more lines or maybe I am just ignorant and this is a fantastic piece as is and the clarity is splendid..I have been off lately so I apologize if this is the case.
I really enjoyed this, though it left me with a sense of unfullfillment. I kept expecting ti find out for sure who or what "I am the one...." actually is. There is much inference as to what or whom this may be but I wnated to know if I was on the right track so you mught think about adding or revising to include this. The imagery and flow are good but the clarity needs to be tighter. Thanks for sharing! Donna
It is good but what genre are you thinking of doing this in? You might want to include that in "the notes for reviewer" Donna
I am sorry I just do not get all of this..I understand that this person lives in a perhaps delusional state that they have created for themselve and which(I guess) works perfectly well for them and that you (the writer) has total disdain for this person?!? The clarity, imagery, and flow all fell a little short for me. I would suggest using different descriptive words, but then again maybe its just me. Donna
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