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AGE: 47
LOC: Saint Johnsbury, VT
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: December 23
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Poetry / Head Injury
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That night you grumbled upstairs then fell face down on the hard floor unable to get up I watched the world respond, the firemen, the ambulance, then my pale reflection in the window waiting on the hard ER couch Spinal cord fluid cut off your hands and feet, legs were numb,  and after the consultation and operation under the skilled hands of a medical magaican your bones were sewed back together. Weeks in a wheelchair, months in Boston at the Rehab center where so many others lie unab...
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Sudden shock still silently swirls in the dead bed of pine needles holding what was once alive holding the body you fought so hard to be friends with.   Behind these hills is a peculiar path, a secret road out of town out of the state, off the very heart of our earth, a road to another life that you said you wanted and what you took stake on turning away from everyone   Who only wanted to love you. It is here or nothing you said in the dreamed dark, dancing backwards in an old house...
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Poetry / Winter Zone
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Winter Zone~for Jess Old white trees breathe underneath a sea of winter. Skeleton branches sleep in stark, arctic air. A frail sun slinks along a short path until it reaches the edge of Vermont by late afternoon. My daughter's body is now beyond Madonna Mountain. She is the very stream of my doubt merged into a maelstrom that the weather freezes from water. By the time it is night near the house my own guilt shoots the best of myself out. Patiently, I wait for nature to turn back the curtains...
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Poetry / Unordinary Magic
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11 Reviews   7 Comments
I just cut through the cosmos who never shine in my favor so I tossed two stars together to find what lies ahead but there's not enough to place a winning bet. I traded one scar for another like a Yankee player with bad knees whose slid into home plate too many seasons--cracking one fast pitch after he attempts to smack that curve ball quick. In this corner of the country the bill collector is leaving hate mail on my doorstep and letters drift into my vacant stare, the one you used to give yo...
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Well now, this beats all. Very crude and rude and if that's the genre it all fits together quite well. I am trying to stay neutral here being a women and all. This is truly a "shocker" and put with a hard knocking beat, you could probably have quite an audience. So, go for it.
Flash Fiction / To be
Wow! This piece really cuts to the core. Nice touch with the symbols, a way of expression without really being crash. "pleasure pain" seems a bit overdone compared to the rest of this which is so unique. I have read things similar to this but this rises above the mundane, truly.
This poem is tightly woven. The first two stanzas are strong. I believe the "furthermore" and "nevermore" are a bit cliche, the only words that really stand out of place in the piece itself. The longing of emotion here is clear and there's no guess work involved, it's straight forward and to the point.
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The pace and tone work well here. I think it's gory and somewhat sci-fic but it's a good twist on the sexual theme so rich in the movie with Brando. So, you captured the essence of the darker side here in this piece. I'd like to see another section because reading this left me wanting more.
100.0% Review Quality (2 Votes)
this poem really moves along. there is a beat that never stops until the end, it's tightly woven and the pain within the voice of the speaker is very clear. The ending is very powerful and strong! These feelings are not uncommon in my opinion. Keep at it! Susan
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