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you have good poetic emotion and imagination...but it needs to be "cleaned up " 1st sentence.."some"twice, toomuch (maybe a or the).2nd sentence "obvious" too general. the "you" will know...when "you", "you"..sounds like "you" are recommending him to someone! 1st person would be more powerful..."waxes poetic and (intelligent)...the sea doesn't have "banks", that's a river..I thought the ending was a bit of a let down..a shadow? was the person of your imagination? You've got a lot of potential...

Someone once said "don't think" about it when comes to charity or ego and fear will stop you. Yes, I have also done this and missed a blessing..for what we do to the least... Enjoyed your story Thanks

We poets all want to be famous overnight..but I've found that it takes a lot of work..study "how to write poetry" books..study poetry and revise, re-work, re-do your poems..don't "fall in love" with your work..write for your reader..study rhythm(meter). learn the rules before you break them..good luck

It helps to reguritate with words..it clears the tormented mind at times..I do it also with much the same content. There must be a muse from Hell that "attacks us" poets. Not everyone can "stomach" these tirades as they want more sense and form in their poetry...and I've learned that we write for readers...so..good luck..thanks