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AGE:
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LOC: Greenville, SC
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: February 18
LOC: Greenville, SC
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: February 18
I try again and cry you see
but still must write my poetry
I see you saw me scream and sigh
and write ‘til morn, alone I try.
Today I search for words until
Again, I almost lose my will
But then I wonder why some more
And stumble through another door.
Richard Lynn
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Great ambience.."shiver my timbers!" I loved the antiquity. Some of the "long" verses seemed to distract the rhythm some but didn't kill the story. The 4th verse "day-bay" bothered me maybe "light at bay"? over all really enjoyed..do some more.
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I like the words you use, good rhyme; me, glee, invisibility. Abstract actuality is an intriguing title and theme, the feeling I get looking at an abstract painting. Thanks
It is easy to read,very direct.I feel "lost love" has made you sick. I don't understand "bittersweet skin". I like the alliteration "Lost in Lunacy" Might want to explain "sacred sin". Thanks
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