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i feel like i have seen a poem like this many times; all it is, is a list of things that make you happy, and they are all cliches. "Happy I am to be alive" is one of the most basic and cliche things to say, I am pretty sure every person has said that before. In poetry you should aim to express yourself in a way that only you would say it, if your aim is to write good poetry. Try reading some poetry by authors that are regarded as great poets and find one you really like; then try to write a p...

This works well as a description of something that happens to you, I think it could work better as a descriptive paragraph. As far as poetry goes, you are telling the reader how you feel, and you should be attempting to show them how you feel. In poetry, when someone reads it they should not be reading a description of what happened, but should feel the emotions you felt felt/feel. You also want to be careful about using the word "I" because it often turns into a description of how you feel a...

I recently have gotten into a relationship with another poet, we actually met because she liked my poetry that she read online and started talking to me, so I can easily relate to this poem. I would change the part about getting lost in the persons eyes, because its a cliche way of explaining falling in love or meeting someone special, you hear that phrase everywhere and you are trying to convey this special unique bond between two people and it doesn't seem to fit for me. You should also sca...

I like the idea of the waiting wall, but in this poem you described what you do at the waiting wall and I feel like a poem that describes the wall itself, and compared to deceased person would serve better than telling what you did at the wall. In a poem readers are more eager to search for a poetic expression of the emotions you felt, rather than the actions you did while at the wall.