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LOC: Valencia, CA
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: August 20
LOC: Valencia, CA
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: August 20
I’m Tabitha. I rock. :)
I’m keeping that up there because my friend wrote it, since she’s the one who initially created this thing just to get more points or credits or something… i don’t know. My words: peace, love, life, and happiness… and no, I am not a hippy (if that’s how you even spell it)...
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Three days passed before they found the body. It had been retrieved from the Missouri River and unidentified at first, but today Detective Hally Martin was finally going to get the results of identification through dental records. The body had been found by an elderly couple taking a daily stroll near the banks of the river. The face had been entirely clawed away and the bone structure crushed in, so there was no way to match it with a picture from a missing persons report. Various cuts and b...
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Please don't talk to me... I'm afraed of what you'll think if I respond. Please don't look me in the eye... I'm afraid you'll find out my true feelings. Please don't touch me... I'm afraid I'll become weak in the knees. But most of all Please don't kiss me again... I'm afraid it will make me want you more.
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Dear God, Why does mommy cry when she looks at me? I went in my room to get my dolly, and she held me. I like it when mommy holds me. She smells pretty. I wish my doggie could. God? Why doesn't Ray come home? He's only 13 and can't live at home. I heard mommy tell him to get out. Why did she say that to my brother? Is it because he can't walk straight? Mommy says Ray has stars in his eyes. I like stars. Daddy told me not to talk to Ray anymore. But sometimes he sits me down and says, when I g...
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What an amazing piece. It made me think of the myths of the Greek gods, only modernized. You give very strong visual descriptions and the whole story has a lot of interesting dialogue. It was sophisticated speech as opposed to casual, informal language. The first sentence (about the thunder and lightning) jumps right into the story and therefore holds the readers interest. You know what they say about remembering the first and the last few paragraphs best. Overall this story is very brilliant...
Wow. This story really captured me. From the very beginning, I was drawn in by the complex plot and the rich, vivid detail. I also like how you structured the story, almost like a diary entry. I like how you build up the main character, Darrin Davenport, then gradually work in other characters. Overall, a very well structured piece. Bravo. I'll be eagerly awaiting a continuation!
Hi! Okay so, this piece is very good!!! I love it! So, she is the perfect child, but very stressed out through everything else that's happening around her. It shows the true thoughts of someone who seems so content on the outside. People don't ever notice the troubles of others unless they stand out as trouble makers or other things. Very clever! Very truthful!
Wow... that was a very amazing writing. I definitely wasn't expecting the end. You absolutely have a very good way of making your reader visualize and feel what is going on in the story. You show the intesity of the passion and love so magnificently. I like how it is one of the fairytale love stories and is interupted when you find it is a dream, but you give hope again by saying that you can go back to it. Very imaginative! Fabulous job!
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