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AGE:
70
LOC: Glendora, NJ
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: September 14
LOC: Glendora, NJ
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: September 14
It is naive to think that the few meager deeds and few meager works that happened to be preserved from the past are necessarily the best and most important of the thoughts of these times. Their preservation results only from the fact that a small coterie chose and applauded them, while eliminating all others.
– Jean Dubuffet
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TO CLIMB ABOVE TIMBERLINE Just past tamarack, a nest of brown wrens: dead end, scrabble too loose to traverse, blue-grey granite ‘bulder ston’, meerschaum overgrown by knewal, pale green, tenacious weed. Cleats slip on yellow coltsfoot. Crawl down defeated, ascent ended near noontime; too steep this acclivity. Thirsty - a twist of lemon peel - now descend most listless. Sudden snowbright crest flash sunburst in cerulean: another stumble - pitched headfirst: limb broken, pitiable...
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If birds were to sing this false spring when jonquils mistakenly bloom in January If birds' song die like daffodils locked in ice and my heart no longer breaks If my words weep as the March wind blows and April rain’s spent on unplanted soil If my memory’s selectively dim and grim age intrudes with hints of frailty If there’s no point and none to invent: imagination dry, shriveled, past If tears never come and emotion is absent, ...
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IN THIS STYLE Delicate, lethargic, wearing headphones, I did not hear you approach while I whistled to amuse the bird and the sun sliced through Venetian blinds cutting me in pieces as I lay on the Persian patterned carpet. This fashionable manner of communication, this affinity, obliterates the marksmanship of all the corporals, makes this simple common parcel even more priceless: be it diamonds, sea sand, an annuity, or an acquaintance. The apple tree in the garden presents a case in point:...
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THE WAR Carry on this sad imbroglio supposing satisfaction still in reach, thinking every altercation will yield nothing more than petty squabble. Hungry, thankless, mind agape, aflame: run, run self-possessed and fleeing toward senseless time and end of seasons to be near filled up, yet never full. Return stunned from war amid the children: in Fall to bury, in Spring to plant the seed that blossoms fully - but we’re not relieved: profuse fruit, prodigal life of despair. Thus we struggle in o...
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“A kindness done to the dead is a true kindness, for one does not expect a favor in return.” - Rashi's commentary on Genesis 47:30 WHEN I AM DEAD Will you be kind to me though you can expect no favor because of it? Or will you dismiss me, earning scant reward for doing otherwise? Though you don’t expect it, I’ll come and tell you what it’s like, if you’re nice. But if you’re not, you’ll have to find out on your own, I‘ll not help. So you see, it will pay to be truly kind: wash my body, wrap m...
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The last stanza does not seem to me to sum up what has gone before. It seems unecessary or mistated. He does not wait: he calls her bluff. Both red and black lose. Yet they win. We are not prepared for the cliche 'wheel of fate'.
This is entertaining and the little hook on Suzie is funny. We call ours Rosie. However, I'm not sure about the last sentence; or the second to the last for that matter. Well written but a trifle long it seemed to me and would benefit from compression, especially the first paragraph - and it's relation to what follows. The map compared to an origami was unique. Contains some interesting elements bordering on the fantastical. You might try pushing it even further in that direction without bein...
Hello, first of all I like this; your idea comes through and is well said. But I would like to make a few comments by way of encouragement. To me, the first line seems a little overcooked. Perhaps leaving out "pale" would help, it doesn't quite go with "earthy" in my mind. The use of "seep" in the third verse confused me at first - until I looked it up - it seems it's usually used in the sense of "seep into" or "seep through". Do you mean to say something like "the ghost seeps into me with it...
I think you said what you wanted to say in a relatively straightforward and unique way. Air-tight should not be hyphenated (airtight); whereas stone cold should be (stone-cold) - according to Webster's. "developing off the reel" is an interesting image but I'm not sure that "reels" are clothes-pinned. I guess reels of 35mm might be but I thought of reels of movie film first. The darkroom image comes through well though. I hesitate to suggest "developing in the pan". The "stoic" image was wond...
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