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I have been a son A brother A husband A father Now I go to be with my father In him I find peace Suffering I have left behind The eternal that is my soul endures I have been promised a kingdom Weep not for I have found Joy without Pain Day without Night Love without Hate Life beyond Death This world I have not forsaken Yet I can not stay I have found my way home I hope to see you again some day
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The Day After And the awe of the day Did not dim in the night Ignited the fires of faith Renewed the strength of the fight Throughout the nation Determined once again to dream No matter what the circumstances No matter how impossible the dream Mountains Moved Rivers Crossed Prayers Answered Hope restored Belief as concrete As the barriers of old Sound the horns of liberty Sing the songs of praise America is still the land of the free Home of the brave Destined to move forward As a nation un...
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Can I Just Say I love this site. I hope it never goes away. I've been thinking it gives me the opportunity to say what I want to say. Even when my grammar may be a little off. Even when there may be a word misspelled. It's better than a friend, because their interest is fleeting, like a whim, whenever I am drinking. It's better than a punching bag when I am seething. Like right now, and the feeling is fleeting. I've never had the opportunity to make it known. I've never felt more poetic. I've...
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I lament the passing of time. Like a lemming, I follow, Into oblivion. Oceans of disconsolate, destitute souls rush to meet me. Jagged outcroppings catch me in an eternal embrace. I have lost my definition. I merge with the past. The present is barred from me. The future withheld whimsically, mockingly the laughter of gales assaults me. Tonight's darkness will have no reprieve. No sighs will be heard. Silence, only, will speak of me. Yet, even the deaf shall not hear. My being will fade.
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It was difficult to traverse The Frigid Depths Made increasingly impenetrable By the building storm The icy outcroppings dug Into Bareflesh Bringing forth Blood Freezing Instantly into indescernable patterns Breath coming in rasps Life waning as the moon Sings to those Anxiously waiting No chance of repreive Steam rising Red rivers flowing A silence Quietly the storm Rages on
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I found a couple of errors in the text. I find the dialogue between Commander Le-Yetal and his team a little redundant. When the commander tells Scout Three to "Capture the young and health Shatarians... Leave behind the aged and sick Shatarians," the dialoge does not flow naturally. In natural speech, there is no need to repeat what the pursued are. I understand the first mention of Shatarian, but the second mention is unnecessary. The word off is misspelled in the scene where Ursalla is inj...
I would firt like to say that I am a man. Having said that, I must say I was blown away by this poem. The imagery was powerful. The use of "Oooooooh", did as much for the feeling of the piece as the references to fruits and curves. I felt the undulating undercurrents sweep me away. I am certain that this is an affair, yet I am also certain of her divine right to it. I am happily married, and hope that our unions hold just a portion of the passion this piece imparts to the reader. I am breathl...
I think you have a great story here. I think that it keeps the reader engaged. I look forward to reading the rest. I only caution the story could fall into paths that have already been crossed. I am an avid sci-fi and fantasy reader and this story seems to travel roads that have already been frequented. I don't know what the future of this plot holds, but unique stories are always the ones that keep me turning the page. If this story holds up that will be the case. So far, so good. I need mor...
I think you have a great talent for discription. The imagery flashed through my head as the assault scene took place. I am not sure how sci-fi this is. If it is sci-fi I guess that part is yet to come. The story works, and I am interested in more. It had a really nice flow. Great job! I'd like to read more.
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