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AGE:
22
LOC: Greenwood, IN
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: August 15
LOC: Greenwood, IN
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: August 15
I always have trouble with these things. I don’t like talking about how amazing I am. I usually like to leave that for other people to find out and then write tales and epic poems about my greatness.
I’ve had a love of writing for several years now, and I’m hoping someday to get published, maybe eventually turn a little carreer out of this. I started in poetry, just kind of taking my emotions out on paper. It was fun, most of my stuff was shyte, but that’s cool. I’ve moved on into prose, which I find I’ve got a bit of talent for… I hope you enjoy the small glimpses into my mind that this site allows you. Be wary of getting lost, you might not come back.
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Soul spilled out, congealed into words.
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Loss sires insight, pain breeds beauty.
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Effort destroys what only impusle creates.
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Found myself through finding my characters.
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Past before; future behind; walking backwards.
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This is a cute and creative one. It's coming from a different angle. I don't know if it's what they're looking for. If they have the right sense of humor, it could just work. Cool stuff.
The only grammatical thing I saw was in your second stanza, first line: clothes not cloths. I like this, it's a different perspective on suicide. Told from the clarity one assumes is achieved after death. Keep working on this, I'd love to hear it played some day.
I had never heard a spider called sleeping lovers before, but that was an awesome image. I especially like the title, using death is especially appropriate considering that an orgasm used to be called "the little death." Kudos, you know your stuff.
I have to say, I think this is my favorite thing I have read on this site. Ever. That being said, I need something constructive... At points it has a very songlike quality, and others, it completely does not. But it works, very effectively, I'd say. The imagery is beautiful, my favorite is the final two lines of the second stanza. You seem to break the pattern/feel of the peice in very well thought out places, I love the way it works. Kudos.
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