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LOC: King Of Prussia, PA
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LOC: King Of Prussia, PA
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: January 17
Poetry is truth wrapped in riddle, abstraction, at times ambiguity, but truth must be at the core, for a poem to be elevated to what I feel is its proper status. It is why so few poems we may create actually touch a chord within is, for the search for truth about the world larger, or most importantly, about ourselves, is a hard rock to sculpture and can be as fleeting as the first fallen leaf caught in the autumn winds. Yet we stay the course, sculpting the rock of ourselves, the world, to get to that truth. We stay the course, we do falter. And art is born somewheres along the wayside.
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THE SIEGE (PROLOUGE) 10:45p.m. The summer sauna night had room 214 shirt-stick humid, the once vibrant and illustrious setting now alien, stripped of its deco-ambiance and more vacant than I’d ever seen it in two semesters. Down the slope of frat-hill, the town of South Oaklands had been stripped just as barren. It’d taken all of three days after finals concluded to reduce an urban jungle into a veritable ghost town. For all the explosion of pomp and circumstance at the start, it seemed my fr...
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"Beyond the Pencil" What skin? what bone? I AM these writes; Bled on bleached beech engraving --this ink to that think--baseless thoughts turn these axis spinning, And away I go flying off that rocker, lost in all that was never captured in the shade of granite no. 2. "Opening the Enlightened Eye" "You" must die As must "I" too For only in concious mind's demise do our selfing thoughts expand into the globe of world larger. And all that is Ego, Ergo, lost exposes the stripped core unto all t...
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Wow, I never knew Chainsaws were so deep... seriously though, this poem is a great example to me of taking a seldom explored moment and delving deep into it to uncover a buried diamond of thought and ponderance. The only criticsm I have would have to be the First Stanza, specifically the word "with" starting both of the last lines in the stanza--they tripped me up a bit, and within the context of a piece like this, where everything else is so concise and flowing and tight, that left me beggin...
This piece is mysterious and thought-provoking, the only question I would have would be wether the whole "can not" vs. "Cannot" is intentional, but either way it works. I started to fall into a big lengthy debate about whether what is being claimed in the piece is in fact true or not (I personally believe the mirror of truth is one we tend to refuse to see rather than are unable but that's niether here nor there...) however debating the claim would be the mistake of a rookie reviewer--the pie...
I like the poem up until the last line. That last line needs to be reworked, the crossed out word "feeling" absolutely does not work for me--I honestly felt like it was a cop-out. You start off with this wonderful image and deft word selection which implies a great deal, the fact that some prior action needed to be excused, and that forgiveness has not been ACTUALLY rewarded, rather imagined in a dream--This wonderful setup which you totally betray in this lackluster final line. It almost mak...
I was really into this piece until I reached that fourth stanza--it was both jarring (not in the right way) and felt like someone shoved it inside the poem forcefully. That said, I will try to dissect it best I can... First of all I didn't like the questions in the fourth stanza. You do such a glorious job of careful and vivid description of these two lovers in the first three stanzas that the sudden introduction of the questions, specifically the change in perspective from third person (the ...
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