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AGE: 37
LOC: Farmington, AR
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: August 01

Hey guys, my name is Darrell Parrish. Following an eight year spell with The Army, and an eventful life following, I have many stories to tell. Writing has been a passion of mine since high school I guess, and I have decided to make an attempt a pursuing something with it. I currently have a completed manuscript titled “Loss of Innocence”, which is making the rounds of agents at this very moment. I have other ideas for new projects, which I will post often. I am grateful for the friends I have made in my year on Urbis, and look forward to making many more.

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Short Story / Just Words
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5 Reviews   4 Comments
‘Fuck you, loser! I’ll fly out there and wip your old ass up and down the street!’ To many, the simple, yet provocative statement that rested safely within the borders of the message box displayed on the computer’s monitor were just words, but for Eugene, they were so much more. For this scrawny, rodent-like person, those words were his golden opportunity to strike out at a population that he had found so much difficulty connecting with. For Eugene, cyberspace was a wa...
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Short Story / The Awakening
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10 Reviews   9 Comments
Ah, sitting here alone watching the rain bead against the windshield under the dim light of a near-by street lamp, I can still remember my first. It was the summer of all summers, the year that my mother finally cut me loose from the tight leash that she had held onto me with all of those years. I was finally free to spend my time away from school running wild across town with my friends. Our mornings consisted of glazed and chocolate delights down at old man Davis’s donut shop, follow...
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Novel Treatments / Loss of Innocence chapter four
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5 Reviews   2 Comments
CHAPTER FOUR: THE CREAM RISES SATURDAY, AUGUST 10, 1991 FORT BENNING, GEORGIA 1530 HRS. As they were now members of First Platoon, E-Company, 2nd Battalion of the 58th Infantry Regiment (training), Colby and Ethan took a healthy look around at their new home for the next few months. Other than the addition of windows along the exterior walls and offices at the head of the room, their new bay looked exactly like the one at reception and as the son of a homebuilder, Colby was more than a littl...
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Short Story / Coach
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10 Reviews   10 Comments
“So, tell me once again where you were Tuesday night around ten o’clock,” Officer Plymon says to me once more as he stands in the corner of the small, windowless room. Bringing my hands to my face, I run my fingers through my shortly-cut, brown hair. To the two arrogant, small-town policemen, this is a simple sign that the exhaustion of the interrogation is wearing me down, but these two jackasses haven’t got a clue. I could tolerate this shit for a lot longer than And...
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Novel Treatments / Loss of Innocence Chapter Three
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6 Reviews   3 Comments
CHAPTER THREE: NEW FRIENDS FRIDAY, AUGUST 9, 1991 FORT BENNING, GEORGIA 0530 HRS. Opening his eyes to find the blinding glare of the overhead lights shattering the remnants of his dream-filled sleep, Colby raised his left arm and looked at his watch. Five thirty already, he thought. Shit, I just got to sleep. Colby rolled out from under the irritating coverage of the wool blanket, placing his feet into his shower shoes and rubbing the sleep from his eyes, taking a good look around the bay and...
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Sci Fi & Fantasy / Keely's Vampire Warrior Prologue, part 1
by msstma
every since their peaceful valley had been overrun by invaders -- 'Ever' They had fought this war -- Today, they had finally managed to push -- they had prayed to the Goddess Morrigan for an -- See the repetitiveness here. Find a way to lose the 'had' n a couple of these. respected for treating his people fairly, had inspired his people and his army to fight -- Repetitive with 'his people'. Good thing I wore my armet helmet. -- use italics here. You also need to show us what an armet helmet i...
Horror / Tristan and Isolde--A Vampire Romance Chapter 2
by martykate
neither asleep nor awake, -- You just said 'instead of sleeping'. The reader is fully aware of the sleep issue. You don't want this to become like a hammer over the reader's head. but somehow losing awareness of where I was. I wasn’t aware when I lost consciousness, -- See the repetitiveness here with aware? Stay away from this. Can’t you tell he was made tonight? -- I don't like this line here. The use of 'made' just doesn't fit right. he chooses not to not to share, -- Pg. 2 this one was co...
Horror / Urban Legend
by SecularProphet
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Action Adventure / Heart of the Assassin
by Niko89101
I understand the need to explain the silencing of the weapon, and you did make some good points. However, if you're that concerned about the noise of the slide,you don't use a weapon such as the Berreta 9. You would go with something like an HK or Luger. These companies make weapons that are made of carbon composite materials so that the mechanical noise of the weapon are greatly reduced. In the scenario that your character is in, he could be faced with multiple aggressors at any gives moment...
Crime, Thrillers & Mystery / The Invisible People
by Him
Beginning to read deeply, with a sudden intense focus she soon sat in a relaxed position. - This line reads a little awkwardly. - With a sudden intense focus, she repositioned herself into a relaxed position and read deeply. Something like this flows a little better. trimmed side burns sat down besides her. - beside They all were blue t-shirts and dark - They all wore. "Maybe she was reading before work started" - Try using italics for thoughts, and save the quotations for dialogue. because t...
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