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AGE: 30
LOC: Hialeah, FL
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: February 07

MOM + DAD = ME

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Non-fiction / Nothing
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I've been left up all night, looking at the ceiling, watching the fan twirl, as my mind meanders about Nothing. Nothing invades every thought of every second of everyday. Her kiss is what I miss at night when I crawl back in the sheets of recollection. Feeling her body recoiled against mine, burnishing my desire.  I melded into Nothing, as she pulled me in close to her.   And offered me her apex, to hold, to taste. I am a chasm that’s holding a stark memory of Nothin...
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Non-fiction / Nothing
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5 Reviews   7 Comments
I have been up and down and sides breaking my head trying to make sense of what, nothing. So, I am left up all night, looking at the ceiling, watching the fan twirl, as my mind meanders about Nothing. Nothing invades every thought of every second of everyday. Nothing's kiss is what I miss at night when I crawl into my "little hole in the wall". Nothing rubs up against me. Telling me in her own way, "Please me..." And how Nothing grips the back of my neck, pulling me clo...
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Poetry / Untitiled
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Surrounded by laughter and loud drunken banter. You stand there. Slender limbs, and sleek figure, You dance around me. Adorned with Rose Colored Lips, and Green Amazon Eyes. Your long hair brushes against my face, As delicate fingers pass over an ever willing, ever able body. You smile and laugh, as to please me. As this salacity bids me, To learn every part of your body, To memorized the way you want to be touched, To pass through you, In a moment of passion and lust. I drive to j...
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Quotes / Lies
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--We all have to live our own lies.--
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Short Story / Domestic
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...”I’m sorry” said the moon to the sky, when it removed the sun from its brilliant blue face… “I’m sorry”, she said, as she turned away in the midst of her grief. Grief for the pain she lost, buried shallow, in her heart. The scars tell the tale of a violent action upon her, from a lover, long ago, and far to close. Present came and went and there was nothing she could do. But cry. Cry his name in anger, rage, hate, love, loneliness, despair, H U R T. Her body shows the story of a lover enra...
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Sci Fi & Fantasy / Eli:The Suspect-Intro
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Poetry / Thine and I
Straight Forward and elegant. Unrequited love is, in my opinion, the best muse any writer could ask for. Beautiful.
Poetry / Flatworld
This piece took me a bit to understand. I think it ran a little long. For me, it would have been perfect if you cut it at "She craved for them." That would have, in my mind, made a perfect ending. Giving the piece more depth. The whole part of planet paradox thing didn't really work for me. In all, the attempt of tying in journey to "Flatworld" to the repercussions of infidelity and solitude is worthy subject to explore, if you can avoid the clichés ahead. I hope this was more constructive th...
Poetry / Memories
Honestly speaking, this is a more a set of clichés than poetry. "Memories are merely photographs” is an example of this. I think you are overly idealizing this psychological phenomenon. Not all memories are "rain droplets running down a windowpane", there are some that are like being punched in the stomach, or the distinct disconnect of space and time when the first whispers of reality set in. (I.e. loved one's death) In my opinion, it would be better time spent, if you romanticize the conten...
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Poetry / Mommy
My God... What a beautiful piece! The circumstances are horrible, but this is so beautifully written. The flow of the words is gorgeous, and the rhythm is on point. The piece is clear and concise. I completely loved the voice of this piece. The child voice you used paints a clear picture in my head, and gives this piece an eriely endearing, and innocent quality. Given the circumstances of the piece. My favorite line in this is: "Mommy was a waitress, but people called her a different name". T...