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This may be obvious, but what is a crystalline seed? I really enjoyed the visual descriptions in the middle section of the poem, but was rather thrown off by the end, it was just too much, perhaps would be better if shortened a little.

I like the overall meassage of the poem, and the hidden analogies. Though I did think it was a bit jumpy at times, mostly towards the end.

From a critical story writting point of view this could use some work, unless you were going for a casual journal, nothing too comlpex or interesting, type of entry. ......I agree with you on some angles of your essay, I don't think that people should be ashamed of listing to Justin, he's great for dancing to. (Talent would be another conversation though, especially if your comparing to people who spend every second of the day composing music till their fingers bleed, this would not include t...

Kudos! This is a great quote.