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AGE: 32
LOC: United States
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: December 15

I just like to read!!

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So I'm sittin' here surrounded by these wickedly white walls Yet they still can't wash out my darkest of Evil black Dreams Yes it's true I have had some peaceful nights Thanks to My Love and My Magick They still won't fade away, how does one put such a cruel sad life behind them? How does one forget all the mistreament and torture that was brought upon such a young soul? Does the pain ever go away? Can any one tell me how to deaden these feelings of being wronged? I have tried to do the forgi...
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Poetry / Fear of Love
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She has no clue why she's here sitting on this step She doesn't know why she worries Causing all the meaningless tears she wept All she knows is that she cares Cares so much that she's frightened She's whispering to herself As the pressure in her head tightens She thinks of all she can lose By saying the wrong thing at the wrong moment She tells herself this is silly With such fear that she'll blow it She promises herself she won't lie Promises herself she'll stay honest, and open She thinks ...
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Journal, Diary, & Blogging / Journal Introduction
I absolutely get the sense that this book is going to be emotional. I like the fact that you have called yourself crazy right in the very beginning. It really shows the turmoil your mind is in through all these years that you have spent keeping these journals. I find myself compelled to read the rest of your entries.
Poetry / December 11 2008
Strength, fear, confusion I like it. This has it all. The line ' These gilded thugs forgot her long ago; that one threw me a little. just didn't seem to fit. I may be losing the tie there. Oh how to see which faces are facades? Oh how to gauge which stages stage the truth? Try not to use "Oh How to" back to back. Throws of the flow abit. 'Although the answers carry twice the weight, My heart beneath them all has yet to break. These last two lines did it for me, full of question and strength. ...
AMAZING!! Fix some of your run on sentances and this would be perfect. If this is in fact a true to life story, then you are doing a wonderful job sharing it. Really brings in the reader and make them feel sympathetic for this character.
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Non-fiction / My Popped Cherry!
I noticed in the note to the reviewer you said this is one of your stories. If you have more like this then you truely need to write your autobiography. I think a book like this with such detail would be a fantastic read for anyone, especially young girls and young adults that have gone through similar expierences. I think your work could lend a voice to alot people out there who feel alone and ashamed about having these kind of things happen to them. I find that people who write from persona...
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