I love the meter and sound of this poem. So evocative of the process of writing. Music with words. Great work.

You have a clear voice, and a strong voice. The passion in this is so strong, I could almost hear you speaking it. The piece is visceral, and really reaches people at soul level. Good work.

Musical. Evocative. Sad. Deep. Beautiful.

Evocative language that allowed me to see this man - the one who hides his past from the world, but trusts the woman he loves to see him as he is. I can actually feelhis struggle to be "the way you wanted to be for me." For me, the ending was predictable from the beginning, but the inevitability of his death in your words is echoed by the inevitability of the poem ending with his death. Interesting and poignant.

Your poem is moving, and it is, as you said, raw and dark. I think it needs a bit of tightening up so that it has more impact. Also, you might try to find ways to get at describing the pain you feel in a less direct way in some of the lines in the first stanza so that when you are direct, it has more impact. Now, let me get to the spelling. "Threw" should be "through", "Ive" should be "I've", "brake" should be "break", "peaces" should be "pieces", "nite" should be "night", "everyine" should b...

This is strong, intimate, passionate, sad and painful, and I think that was what you were going for. It's a story that needed to be told, that needed to escape. The strength of feeling is there; my only suggestion is to tighten up the language to get the most impact, especially in the latter stanzas. It's there that I felt the white-hot beam of light widen a bit, and I wanted it to stay put.

I like this. A nice twist on a Valentine's poem - first an acknowledgment of the triteness of the subject, then a strong ending, all in meter and rhyme. The last nile is perfect - "condemning us to surpass the divine" - beautiful.

So much learned and so much to learn in just six words. What was imprisoning the writer? How did they gain their freedom? Was it physical or metaphysical? No matter, the voice is clear. A good six word memooir on the creative life.

the dialogue sounds real, but I was wondering where this was going until you dropped the bombshell at the end. There was a bit of foreshadowing in the slightly creepy "overheard you on your cell" section, but that only became clear after the last sentence. A good, tight, interestingt 104 words.

A great way to talk about the spring without bringing in all of the cliche elements of flowers, buds, birds, etc. This one really spoke to me in its simplicity and truth.