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First, the little things: spellcheck missed: “That man that the Death Eaters killed was tour godfather, wasn’t he? Ginny told me.â In terms of grammar, academics try to avoid ending their sentences with prepositions. For example: “I personally don’t want to think about what they were up to.â [could be: I personally don’t want to think about what they were doing] The reason is that a preposition (examples to, in, behind, with, etc.) suggests that another word will be following (examples: to th...

Having a genius card in Edward’s wallet is a nice angle especially because the ending calls on your beginning. You might find a more articulate metaphor for Edward’s relationship with research than to call it a “best friendâ since it causes Eddie sleepless nights. I thought you set up a promise to the audience that you didn't fulfill. If genius is 99% perspiration then I want a tale of grit and success against unlikely odds. You made me interested in Edward Hancock II’s obstacles but didn’t e...