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I loved this. I loved that you never said the name that makes you breathless and instead made this a suit of armor for all of us to wear. It did feel like you had written it so I might use it. But I have lived it. Using senses such as taste and breathe were a great tool and very profound. I plan to look for more of your work. Very very touching. Very moving...this work left me wanting more.

The quotes origins are great. I read the quote and thought AND? It needs more to make itself memorable.

Will you is a great title and the first line made me read this until the end. The last stanza could be stronger, but overall emotional, expressive and a nice read.