wow... that was very overwelming. you described the pain and hate deliberatly well! very well done!

i...absolutley...love it! three cheers! i love how you bring hope back into the travlers life and how you keep it quite simple. i understood it and i love it. brava! more please!

the first line kinda set me up for a funny poem. maybe that was just me, but i liked the rest. how you paced all over the place. oh ya, i could tell you were stressed.

love how you put pain into words. you should try to format the poem though, it would give it more "rythem" for lack of a better word. otherwise though it was very good. keep up the good work!

it sounds like there should be more to it. but it was very good. you got the right pictures written and i thank you. keep it up!

that explains so much in so few words. sweet.

few words are good, but there are exceptions. what are you trying to do here?

i love how you never say who, or what, 'he' is; you keep us guessing! i dont know who to help you on the 4th stanza but, with writing talent such as yours, you'll definitaly find something to fit your story and ease your mind! keep the good work coming!

sounds like a great story youve got going on here. you've got the plot all set up and the charecters all played out. good luck with it!

very nice! its a story that i cant wait to read! your descriptions are very good, not too much and too little. your so-far plot is intoxicating! keep it up! i cant wait to read more!