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AGE: 22
LOC: Ashland, OR
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: November 16

I am a girl, who should have been born a tiger, but oh well… I also was given a huge imagination, but poor story telling skills. This is an issue, seeing as how those things in my imagination are starting to become too much for my little mind to handle. So, I have come here to write down some things and develop an ability to share my ideas…even if it is only a limited ability.

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Horror / The Call
Version 1
9 Reviews   11 Comments
 The man stopped. He was close to the place that I had told him to find, but he was a dumb man. What could I expect? I think he knows that he is dumb. He must. It won’t take much to convince him that he is great. I had followed him here. I knew what I was working with, but I wanted to see for sure. He would work. Anyone that stupid would work. He looked around. Suspicious? Maybe he could feel me watching him. Maybe he knew I was here. Maybe he was just a self-conscious human. He kn...
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Sci Fi & Fantasy / Wings On Fire CH01: V
Version 2
15 Reviews   15 Comments
Wings On Fire Ch. 01 Six. I had counted and trust me that was not an easy thing to do. It’s hard to concentrate while your car is rolling over, but I kept track of the sky as the world hurtled past my crushed windshield. I should have known what was going on, I very rarely just black out and wake up to find myself in the middle of wrecking my truck. Whenever he wants me he always uses a calling card, too much of a coward to just come out and say it I guess. Where was the rest of it thou...
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Sci Fi & Fantasy / Wings On Fire CH01: V
Version 1
8 Reviews   8 Comments
 Six, I had counted, of course six. I should have known that, whenever he wanted me to know something he always used a calling card, too much of a coward to just come out and say it. Where was the rest of it though? Had he become so sure of himself that he could now refer to himself with only one, he no longer needed the full 666 to make his point clear. Well if he wants to talk, we can talk I thought as I pulled my arms out from between my steering wheel and the crushed dashboard. I nee...
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Short Story / Betty
by jalubcarrey
I really like the story, I think that cults and cult personalities are very interesting, and I think you did a good job of showing the way a cult operates. I do think that you will need to find a way to format this better. It was a little confusing to go back and forth between the present and the past without some sort of indication. You could do this by using something as simple as italics. I like the idea of adding in the back story as a part of Jack's current problem, but maybe you could t...
Novel Treatments / Relatively Superhuman: Prologue
by Hypernormal
The only typo I could find--"She then changed gear, staring at me, still happy, but subdued. She landed a hot kiss on my lips, and said: “Can I save it for a special occasion?” " should be 'she then changed gears' I think. Or at least I have never seen it the way you have it. Other than that I thought this was amazing. I am hooked on your story and intrigued by the whole idea. You instantly grabbed my attention with your intro, how could I not read on when he had killed her by asking her to m...
Journal, Diary, & Blogging / Letting Go
by chasingdreams1
I think that you have just beautifully articulated the way that everyone feels some time or another in their life. I love the descriptions you put into this. The way you describe waiting for that person to notice you the way you have been noticing them is tragic and completely honest. You have written something that accurately describes the pain that goes along with love, the complete and utter heartache when love is lost, and the addiction to that pain that makes you unable to break free of ...
Crime, Thrillers & Mystery / The Grotto
by Anonymous
I like the concept of this story and the plot, but to be honest it can be difficult to read in spots. Your main character is strong. I feel like you have spent a lot of time developing her, and that makes it easier to connect with her. However, I think you need more details. She tells us information, for instance about the girls, but she is either vague (ex. how they were conceived), or she has enough detail but it is choppy and hard to read (ex. the way they skipped class). In the end I unde...
Horror / Serpent's Song
by MoSanchez
I really don't have very much constructive criticism for this. I'm sorry, but maybe some praise will be an ok replacement. I love your descriptions. They are so clear and you make them so easy to see. Having Eric admire himself in the mirror was funny, and it helped me connect with him faster because I could easily see him in my mind. I enjoyed your voice in this piece. At first I thought that it was awkward to have so many words that really aren't a part of everyday speech, but as I read I g...
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