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AGE: 15
LOC: United Kingdom
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: September 26

Hi im Remi from london but my friends call me Chocolate. Im current working on my second book called ‘A different Kind of Love Story.’ Bits from that should be uploaded very soon. Thanks x

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  Kelis clicked on MSN messenger on her laptop wondering whether Mutyah was online, or any other of her other school friends. She entered in her password and pressed enter. Pissed, she thought, her friends contact list was empty, they were all offline. Just as she was about sign out someone started talking to her. ‘Kool b’ said her person in greeting. Kelis clicked on the new window that had just appeared on her toolbar. Usually, she hated when people online started convosati...
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Young Adult / 4 real
Version 2
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Jekita this and Jekita that for the past few weeks all Jasmine was hearing her man talk about was a next chick! Yes they’ve been friends since primary school but Jasmine still didn’t like the situation. Jasmine best friend Kia said that the only way to find out if something’s going down is to catch him in the act. So there she was speed-walking down the road to catch the 12 to Peckham from Camberwell Green. Jasmine knew that Jekita would be at Leo’s the question was doing what? “Shit, Leo hel...
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Poetry / All my regrets
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Though I search my soul for truth, The truth is hard to find All I see is remorse and guilt Of lies ive left behind It's gone well past the time the time to change Yet why is it so hard The wretched life I know so well leaves my mums emotions scarred I just cant seen to tell the truth I know lies all too well My geatest fear is when I die That I may go to hell I wish that I could turn back time And start all over again And cast this evil from my soul So God will be my friend I know I've hurt ...
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Poetry / Fear
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I am a shodow of darkness Some people pretend to be imune When the lights are off I grow When the lights are on I hide I am dangerous I stalk you in your sleep too On special day like Halloween, people that do not have me are few and far between I am a forgetten part of a house that ozzes dust and dark corners I am the unknown Happieness will never come near, because I AM FEAR
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Young Adult / 4 real
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Jekita this and Jekita that for the past few weeks all Jasmine was hearing her man talk about was a next chick! Yes they’ve been friends since primary school but Jasmine still didn’t like the situation. Jasmine best friend Kia said that the only way to find out if something’s going down is to catch him in the act. So there she was speed-walking down the road to catch the 12 to Peckham from Camberwell Green. Jasmine knew that Jekita would be at Leo’s the question was doing what? “Shit, Leo hel...
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Poetry / the power is out
I like it. It's punchy and is clear. I personification of feelings really work and I really think it is publishable. Well done
Poetry / Cliffhanger
I thnk it has a rhythm to it, which is alway good when it comes to peoms, is it about somone falling and someone else not being able to catch them?? That's what i got from the last stanza anyway. 'But my fingers are down to the bone this time.' This confuses me, i dont want to say that it's confusing because it may just be me but in my opinion it doesnt fit with the rest of the piece in terms of the flowing of ideas. . good work though!!
Poetry / Know Me
Fabulous, I love it!!! And Im not really a fan of non- rythmical poetry. But it moved me, the methaphors deep and thought provoking. I would love for you to tell me what it was inspired by, as it reminded me of a relationship poem. Bravo!!
Young Adult / Bacchanilian
Beginning is good, not too much description but enough to envisage your main character and her surroundings. Similies to describe her surrounding were effective. Maybe rethink the sentences that relate to filming, they remind me of stage directions. In my opinion is nessesary. The piece is very effective though. Well done
Young Adult / Shy-N-Bold
It was great!!! I loved the piece. You used a couple of phrases twice though!Like ' the bell rang, warning that class was about to start.' It's just a personal thing but I dont like when the same phrase is used twice so close together to a piece that I can pick up on it. Excelllent thought, I definatly, buy it!! Post the rest. And keep writing.
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