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I almost passed this poem by, I was skimming through it and then I saw the line about Brother Bear. Up until then I thought you might be talking about a dog. The rest of the poem grabbed my heart. The last line made me think about the surreal possibility of this occuring in my own life. Would it get any easier? Would seconds turn to minutes and then to hours to stretch out the time between painful memories? Nice work, a poem is a poem to me if it causes introspection

I love the simplicity of this poem, I immediately connected myself and my own life. The only thing I didn't fully understand was where you said "Take away All that is sad All of me All that is bad" Do you want "all of you" to be taken away? or only the bad parts of you? Great work

A picture is formed easily in my mind of a child running around discovering the wild. It draws me in, the only thing I find confusing is at the beginning you are speaking in past tense "as a child I played" and at the end you are in the present, "I'll come back tomorrow".

The first stanza of your poem pulled me in because I always wonder myself why I seem to only be able to write during a crisis, or depression or when I hit a crossroads in my life. The only critique I have is that when rhyming I try to stay away from using the same sentence ending word in the same stanza.....I think it flows and is more interesting that way. You lost me a bit at the end..the second last stanza in particular...and the last stanza was nice, but didn't pull all of your previous o...