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AGE: 18
LOC: Lehigh Acres, FL
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: May 26

I’m new at this writing thing..thats fersure. People always are saying i am good but i dont believe i am even close. I need a lot of help. I am posting my story on here to see what you all think. Its a true story and i hope to make it much better by using this website. So check it out or message me and i will return the favor. Thanx :)

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6 Reviews   2 Comments
My heart was beating as if a hummingbird was fluttering inside my chest. I could feel his heart beating just the same. A cool breeze went by and moved my hair into my eyes. He took his hand and brushed it behind my ear and smiled. "You are so beautiful", he whispered. I realized at that point the new some English but I didn't say anything back. He lifted my head and kissed me again, he was much taller up close and he had to bend down a little to reach me. I was wishing this moment would never...
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Version 1
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I went to work on Sunday morning. It was a beautiful autumn day. The cool wind blew through my brown hair. The sun wasn’t yet up and the restaurant was empty, from what I could see outside. I walked through the kitchen door in the back of the restaurant. I went quickly through the kitchen as I always did when is was alone. The kitchen crew would talk in Spanish to each other and it make me feel uncomfortable to be around them. I didn’t like all the attention they gave me, some more then other...
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Flash Fiction / Adequate
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Poetry / Pitch Black
very interesting. i sense some strong emotions. this was good :) i like how you skipped some lines...which makes the reading better
Poetry / eventually
this was cute. i enjoyed reading it ;)
haha cute..but it could go both ways..
Journal, Diary, & Blogging / Changes in Attitude, Changes in Grattitude
this is important to write about these types of things in blogs and journals. nice work :)
50.0% Review Quality (2 Votes)
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