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Quotes / Wicked Words
You can only bite your tongue for so long
before it is severed
and wicked words bleed from your mouth.
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CloClo reviewed Version 3 -
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Very insiteful, this speaks to me.
I like how this creates an alternate saying to ‘dont bottle things up’, it’s alot more interesting and catchy.
I like the choice of words such a ‘bleed’ it seems almost uncontrollable which is an effective image in this context.
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Owl_Light reviewed Version 3 -
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I like this. The idea of biting your tongue but you’re so cross about ahtever it is that you make your tongue blled and then have to say what you were going to say in the first place. Well done.
charisma_styles reviewed Version 3 -
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So far so good. I believe this is a true quote cause I can’t even begin to count how many times I’ve tried to bite my tongue before wicked words came out of my mouth.
Love to hear more.
Isca reviewed Version 2 -
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Such chilling honesty in the first two lines. The third line, however, is my favourite, as it commands respect and exudes such fierce imagery.
JesusFreak reviewed Version 2 -
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a powerful qoute that holds hands with a real good piece of minds eye imagery
wltshr reviewed Version 2 -
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So true.
Quotations are often more memorable when quite pithy. Just a thought but perhaps it could be reduced without losing it’s power.
“You can only bite your tongue for so long before wicked words bleed from your mouth.”
Good work
Wltshr
cyndiratz reviewed Version 2 -
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I really like this quote. It very broad that leaves the words lying in a personal place. This could be used on many, many levels.
derekosborne reviewed Version 2 -
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I like this. Can I steal it for a line of dialogue? As a quote it is OK but you know quotes need that quality of cementing the memory so this is a trifal too long – but still fun. And an excellent image, which is why its so tempting to put in a characters mouth. Nice one.
Pladdyboog123 reviewed Version 2 -
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This piece is very dark and full of meaning. Though short, it is very interesting to read and to dwell on. This would make a great ending line of a piece of poetry, if you felt like expanding it. You could write about keeping silent and holding a grudge until finally all of those bad thoughts come pouring out. This is only a suggestion, the quote works the way it is right now as well. Good job!
sadpoet reviewed Version 2 -
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Loved the title. The quote feels long though. You can look at it in sections and pick out the highlights. For example, it is understood that a tongue resides in the mouth, so “from your mouth” can be eliminated.
I tried to shorten the first part of the piece but “for so long” is imperative as it expressed the length required to get to the point where the wicked words have to finally spill.
Consider:
A tongue bitten so long severs, bleeding wicked words.
Just a thought. It’s absolutely great!
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