Thank you, Michael.
I thought you would have gotten from the title
that this was for WB’s wife…
hence Wonder Boy needs Wonder Bread
not all that private…
and you must remember from Cartoons
who wonderboy was… no?
anyway, this Wonder Boy…is mainly nothing
wonderful at all, which I figured my readers would
infer in the tone of the work, but a weakling who needs to survive on more than the biblical ‘bread alone.’
and For sure I figured you for a Wax for Blood
catcher.
He is barely human and has wax in his veins for blood.
The first entire stanza is a W.B. W.B. play on words
until I say
turn it around
and there I invert W.B. to B.W. (better or worse) marriage vow.
I’m glad that you found much in the way of agreement with the poets message and could relate.
I should have advised everyone to go fly off the edge of the “fucking world” as that really punched the message I wanted to communicate, but I chickened out as often times expletives merely detract from a work.
But again, this is written for a woman who is SICK and TIRED of the status quo… so she may very well have spoken in that way.
Thank you for kind words and connection of minds,
souls must not be far behind as as poets we often wear them, along with our hearts, on our sleeves.
Buenas noches.
Poetry / Loves Great Reward
for WB’s wife
Wonder Boy needs Wonder Bread.
Wax for Blood
Web of Bondage
Wed for Bliss
Wedded Misery
Turn it around
Why for Better or Worse
Why?
Better pretend!
Take consolation:
The only love you can ever
be sure of
is
really
the love you, yourself, feel.
All else just speaks of love.
Show-me care, is better.
Show-me love, is 2nd best.
Let me love
and everyone else
go fly off the edge of the World.
This is my heart
This is my mind
Here is my love;
it is all of love I’ll ever truly know.
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Your insight is deep and poignant. It flowed well and was easily taken to heart. Show me- care is better drew me in. Keep it up.
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I really liked this E. The only part that trips me up is the first stanza… maybe too many privately shared references that you have to be part of the “in” crowd to understand. From the line, “web of bondage” though, I felt like i was included. I liked the line beginners, “Web” and “Wed.”
Much of the poem is philosophical though emotionally voiced, which gives it a slight edge. I wouldn’t have to agree with everything you say (although I do) to enjoy the poem and it’s message. I also enjoyed the advice you give to everyone else – fly off the edge of the world… nice.
i don’t review much poetry, but i liked this piece.
“Show-me care, is better…edge of the World.” good rhythm, ‘real’ voice.
not sure if the bold type at the end is necessary, though.
overall, personable and sweet.
While my eyes weren’t opened, I did enjoy the emotions. The only real love is love felt… I wholly agree! Being a stream of consciousness, I believe you have more profound insights if you search yourself more. Surely, you know more of love than you let on.
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